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જ Erstwhile જ ☾Cel☽

Title: Erstwhile
Author: mahqtab6
Reviewer: rinaXhazurina

GENERAL QUALITIES: 33/50

Title: 5/5

The title is unique with its uncommon use and it's a single word. It gives a feeling of deep insight and is open to multiple interpretations which could only be defined when the story is read, calling for readers to look into what wonders it could enlighten by the title alone.

Book Cover: 4/5

The cover is good. The dim choice of colors gives it a gloomy ambiance with hints of mystery and thrill. The limitation of the colors also makes it simple, adhering to the simplicity of the title. Displaying red as an outstanding color highlights the mature topics of the book and the images of a typewriter, a detective and another person, the city in the background, and the mail and postcards maybe, emphasize the plot tools. However, there is a problem with the font color because the dim hue of the main title blends in with the dark background. A line of text at the bottom of the long white rectangle is also damaging the design due to its total blurriness. I suggest changing either the font color or background into something brighter as long as it makes the main title stand out. Expand the size of the subtitle too to the point it can be readable. Wattpad makes book covers quite blurry but expanding it will definitely help make it readable.

Blurb: 3/5

The blurb shines on the main conflict of the story and the internal struggles of the world's society, already laying out the challenge to thrill readers. There is a presence of a unique storytelling proposition that encourages readers to read the book apart from other similar books. We get to know the external challenge of the main protagonist and a glimpse of his internal or emotional conflict which I believe should be specified to give readers an idea that he is in an internal dilemma as much as he is facing an awful problem where his journalism is illegal. Specify the problem so readers will be deeply and genuinely rooted in caring for the main protagonist. The reading flow was rough due to the broken English, incorrect word forms, and misspelled capitalization that I had to read the blurb three times. I understand that English isn't the author's first language, but by reading English books often can help you practice writing the language. Asking someone proficient in English to proofread it is also very helpful and offering it up for a review is also an excellent choice to improve it so thank you for choosing me as your reviewer. I hope you'll be able to fully understand the contents of this review as I'll try my best to convey it as simply as possible.

Characters: 5/10

The characters seem interesting with their own distinct atmosphere. They each clearly have their own struggles and share similar external conflicts concerning the occupation of the British. However, it was very hard to identify the characters throughout the story due to the hastened info-dump of their introduction. It was hard to know the characters as an individual because you only know them by what kind of relationship they have with the main character. I acknowledge that the characters are active; Hari Babu is doing something to push the plot further and finish a task.