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જ The Last Remains જ ☾Cel☽

Book Name: The Last Remains

Author: bismathelastremains

Reviewer: rinaXhazurina

General Qualities: 36/50 Total

Title: 5/5

The title fits well with the main plot of the story and is open for interpretations related to the elements of the story.

Book Cover: 4/5

The cover gives off the intended atmosphere given by the story when read. However, the only problem is the capitalization of the words. I suggest turning the first letters of the words "last" and "remains" to capital because it is, after all, the title, which has to be important in how it's also presented.

Blurb: 4/5

The blurb was so good it sparks intense curiosity for readers to want to know the story. It gives suspense with the mysterious disappearance and a unique storytelling trait with the blood stains appearing in the book. We also get to know about the protagonist and her role. The only issue is the sentence structure, with the proper sentence lining and placement capital letters after a period or a question mark.

Writing Mechanics and Style: 8/15

Beautiful descriptions - The first chapter holds a lot of potential. The objects from where the descriptions are used are very lovely like: "The shop was filled with various old trinkets and furniture, each with its own story to tell" -first chapter

Writing structures/syntax - The main problem in the story is the execution of delivering the ideas for the story. This can be fixed by learning simple English writing structures and grammar and reading more English books. Having the simple knowledge of this is enough to fix these writing mistakes and write the sentences clearly, aligning the words with the purpose of what the writer wants to make the readers feel and understand in a particular part of the story. These include fixing spelling mistakes, writing consistent verb tenses, proper punctuations like knowing when to put a period or a comma, placing conjunction words when needed, avoiding shifting sentences to next lines often unless it's the next paragraph, fixing the two or three spaces in between the words, and properly organizing the words into meaningful sentences to avoid making the reading flow awkward and broken. Also, avoid underlining and capitalizing the words within the narrative part unless it's an author's note. That's mostly the issue that needs to be fixed, and I'm sure at least 80% of your story will properly convey the meaning behind each line, and thus, each scene.

Characters: 6/10

Interesting Main Protagonist - Vera as the main protagonist is good. I like that she is introduced to the shop as a newcomer. It makes her character step into the unknown and challenges her. Her skills are introduced through the blurb, giving readers an idea of how to describe her as a character.