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[Based on the first 12 chapters]
Title: 5/5
The title is mysterious and fits with the theme of the story. I can guess it's got a symbolic meaning. It's unique and makes the reader curious.
Cover: 4/5
I like how the faces on the cover give an abstract and suspenseful vibe. It's pretty eye-catching and relevant to the genre; I'd pick it up if I saw it in a bookstore. However, I'm not sure how it ties to the story itself.
Blurb: 4/5
It's simple and straight to the point. Every sentence is carefully crafted, hinting at the overall picture of the story. It doesn't reveal too much about the plot or its details. I like how not a single sentence is wasted with unnecessary information. However, I think it could be better and give a clearer picture of what the story is about.
Creativity/Originality: 10/10
The way the story starts with the two brothers as they're younger is unique. The relationships among the characters and the plot twists drive the story in a way that I don't see often. So far I can say it's original.
Plot/Flow: 10/10
The plot is strong and unpredictable, just like any good mystery. I like how the scenes are sorted out one after another, creating suspense and leaving the reader at the edge of their seat at all times. It keeps the reader wanting more.
Characters: 10/10
All the characters are well-written and have visible character development. Each of them has a distinct personality and doesn't seem boring or one-dimensional either.
Writing Style/Grammar: 6/10
The writing style is okay, but it's not great. The writing sounded pretty basic most of the time. The descriptions of the characters were really good; they told a lot about each character's looks, personality, etc. I could easily visualize them from such descriptions. I wish it was the same for the scenes. The author was mostly "telling" and not "showing." In this way, most of the scenes lacked immersiveness. Though the tension of the plot was enough to keep the reader at the edge of their seat, the descriptions could be better. To "show" and not "tell", you could simply use words that describe colours, textures, smells, etc. Just this much would make a big difference in the reader's imagination. I could also spot some typing errors. The grammar seemed fine.
Reading Enjoyment: 5/5
It was a very enjoyable read, indeed. The reader would never get bored while reading.
Overall: 44/50
The story has everything required for a good mystery or thriller. I'll just recommend the author to work on the writing style.
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