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[Based on the first 7 chapters]
Title: 5/5
The title fits with the story perfectly. It's attractive too. However, it feels a bit too long. Just "The Lolita Diaries" with "The Pre-Lolita Life" as a subtitle reads better.
Cover: 4/5
I like how the colours resonate with the main character's vibe and likings, but I'm not really sure what the fluffy-looking thing is supposed to be. It's a little confusing. Moreover, the cover is missing an important element: the author's name/username.
Blurb: 4/5
The blurb feels okay, it gives the readers a glimpse of what the story is about. However, it would have been better if the author had added a special story element to it. What makes the story special? What makes it different or stand out from the rest of the stories in the same genre? By answering these questions, the author will be able to hook more readers. But the author should make sure not to add any spoilers.
Creativity/Originality: 7/10
So far the story is about a teenager and her struggles with friends and love. It's pretty typical. What I found interesting was Rosette's heartwarming relationship with her sisters and mother. The diary entries at the end of each chapter were creative too. However, I believe the author can get more creative with the ideas and make the story more original.
Plot/Flow: 8/10
The plot seems very simple so far. At some times, it was easily predictable. It's good to surprise the readers sometimes, especially to keep them reading your story. Apart from that, the pacing felt nice and comfortable to read.
Characters: 9/10
The characters felt really natural, just like how a teenager would see the people around them. The author has done a great job writing from Rosette's point of view. Besides, the other characters show distinct qualities. However, some characters like Tracey and Andrew felt pretty shallow. Nevertheless, they contribute to the story greatly. As for Rosette's sisters, both of them had their differences but even so they managed to get things right. This relationship among the three sisters is really iconic, and I'd love to learn more about them in future chapters. As a reader, I'm mostly rooting for this trio.
Writing Style/Grammar: 9/10
The writing style fits the perspective of a teenager, making it perfect for readers of the same age group, which seems to be the story's target audience. The writing was easy to visualise, too. However, I noticed some minor grammatical and punctuation errors. A thorough proofreading will help, as will checking for tense changes and typos.
Reading Enjoyment: 5/5
The simple language and vivid imagery made reading enjoyable. Apart from that, the descriptions were fun and somewhat nostalgic. The idea of adding diary entries at the end of each chapter kept me engaged as well.
Overall: 51/60
Overall, the story has good bones and execution. The writing sounds perfect from Rosette's perspective, and I'd like the author to keep up with it. I just hope the plot thickens and gets more interesting as new chapters come up.
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