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Taming Daimon Aragon

   Hi. Here is your critique demigodwithacoffee. Thank you for sharing your story with us. God bless.

   Critic: @Carelle07

Characters:

  ▶ I love the characters lalong lalo na si Daimon Aragon.Gusto ko, yung pagiging naturally cold niya na may pagka-sarcastic pero may pagkasexy. And I like how you arranged the characters on their different characteristics,  kasi nadadala ako sa emotions na ipinapalabas lalong lalo na yung galit ng bida sa babeng mahal niya NOON. Over all the characters are perfectly well define.

Structure/Plot:

  ▶ Well, its a bit complicated at first but as I've read further naiintindihan ko yung mga twist na ginagawa mo sa story.Ang ganda kasi, medyo marami-rami na rin akong nababasang 'revenge stories' pero may ibubuga rin pala ang storyang ito.

Theme/Philosophy:

   ▶ The theme is General Fiction. It suits perfectly for your story although pwede rin siyang Romance. And I like this story, kasi maypagkakaiba ito sa ibang stories na nabasa ko na at I like your own style on writing this story. So, keep it up!

Settings:

   ▶ You perfectly described when and where it happens. Kasi importante iyon sa aming mababasa, kasi parang nandodoon din kami sa kung saan nagaganap ang story. And I must say that you really did well.

Dialogue:

  ▶ Maganda naman ang mga dialogue ng bawat characters pero may kunting kunti lang akong isusuggest, yun yung paggamit mo ng tamang words. Pero overall maganda yung pagdedeliver ng mga characters sa convo's nila.

Author's Style:

  ▶ Ang ganda ng style mo sa pagsusulat, kasi parang inererelate mo sa aming mambabasa kung saan at ano ba talaga ang storyang ginawa mo.

Mood:

  ▶ Seriousness is very visible in the story. And I must say that it is very suitable sa characteristics ng characters kasi parang may revenge na nagaganap(tama ba?).

Insights:

  ▶ A world without love means nothing. And love without trust and honesty will result into emptiness. Just proceed of what you are doing Ms. Paper-eater (demigodwithacoffee).

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Rating of your story:

1.00 (98-100)

Letter Marks and it's Descriptions:

IP - ( In Progress )

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