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Hi. Here is your critique @DysRobles. Thank you for sharing your story with us. God bless.

Critic: beyvehjen

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Characters:

▶ I really like yung past. Nate-tense ako sa characters mo. Yung miss na miss ni Quim si Axy kahit sinampal niya ito haha.

Structure/Plot:

▶ I like it, simula pa lang, nagustuhan ko na ito kaya sana pagbutihin mo pa ang sinimulan mo. Kasi pag sinimulan mo, kailangan tuloy-tuloy na.

Theme/Philosophy:

▶ Yung I think, 6 years diba? 6 years na nawala siya tapos nag-modelling siya at bumalik, yun yung typical na nangyayari. Yung mawawala ka kasi kailangan mong mag-move on or ipamukha sa lahat na hindi ka trash lang.

Setting:

▶ I like the setting. Hindi siya nagsimula sa isang school or first day kundi sa isang reunion. Although may nagamit na ng ganitong setting, ayos pa rin dahil pinanindigan mo.

Dialogue:

▶ Malinaw naman sa akin ang exchange of conversations. Alam mo kung sino ang nagsasalita so, thumbs up.

Author's Style:

▶ Taglish well done! I like it. Siguro hindi mo lang dapat in-expose yung bad words.

Mood:

▶ The mood, may happy part merong mood na nag-iiba siya hahahahha. Hindi, joke lang. I mean, yung type ng mood kung saan binabalikan mo yung dati mong memories.

Insights:

▶ Kagaya nga ng sabi ko kanina, okay lang siya pero panindigan mo yung sinimulan mong storya/plot.

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Rating of your story:

1.75 ( 89-91 )

Letter Marks and its Description:

IP - ( In Progress )

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