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The Deadly Writers

   Here is your critique @monosodium_glutamate. Thank you for sharing your story with us. God bless.

   Critic: SheWhoDoesntCare

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Characters:

   📍 Katherine -- I wonder why she left and never came back, but that's the mystery of it.
   📍 Raven -- I love his personality and his sudden change of emotion.
   📍 Big Boss -- who turned out to have an appearance of a 10-year  old girl and happened to be the oldest among the Deadly Writers. I like how she was being described in the story, parang siya 'yong boss nila Eugine sa Ghost Figther ba 'yon? Correct me if I'm wrong, hindi ako sure. Haha

   📎 All in all, nagustuhan ko ang presence nila sa story (kahit na hindi pa talaga lumalabas ni Kath). Parang may hint na ako kung ano at kung gaano kalaki ang role na gagampanan nila sa story. I hope na sana mapangatawanan sila ni Author hanggang sa dulo.

Structure/Plot:

   📍 How did the story begin? -- Katherine went missing and Raven promised to find her no matter what.
   📍 What are the events/circumstances in the story that are significant? Are the events connected? What and where we think is the dramatic moment in the novel? What is the most interesting part? What is the part that we like the most? Why? What is/are the conflicts in the story? Are these conflicts resolved? How? -- Wala pa akong maiku-komento tungkol dito, hindi pa naman tapos ang story at ang prologue pa lang ang meron. But I think, based from the way it's author writes, magiging maganda at interesting ang ikot ng story.

Theme/Philosophy:

   📍 What is the story all about? -- It's about the Deadly Writers, naku-curious na rin ako kung ano ba talaga sila. Hmm.
   📍 Is the theme relevant to the present? Why? How? -- Idunno.

Setting:

   📍 Time -- it wasn't stated but it's pretty obvious, kaya no problem.
   📍 Places/Atmosphere -- ayos din and well described. I can almost see them through imagination.

Dialogue:

   📍 Conversations are well exchanged and delivered, no prob with them.

Author's Style:

   📍 Madaling maintindihan ang mga salitang ginamit, tama ang mga grammars at pwesto ng mga punctuations. Magaling.

Mood:

   📍 Sad and mysterious.

Insights:

   📍 Well, prologue pa lang ito but it didn't stop me to learn something from it. TRUST. It's very important to keep it and hold onto it. Lalo na kapag wala ka ng ibang makapitan at ang lahat ay nagsasabing wala na, ang tiwala mo na lang sa bagay na iyon o sa taong iyon ang panghahawakan mo. HOPE. Hoping from things that seems to be impossible in some way. Hoping that even how big the problem is, you'll be able to find a way to solve it.

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Rating of your story:

1.00 ( 98-100 )

Letter Marks and its Description:

IP - ( In Progress )

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