Genre: FantasySummary: Lucifer goes back to his past hoping to save humanity from hell. Literally.
Statistic score: 95% A
My score: A+
Negatives:
-Note: This is the first time all of the negatives have been scattered like this. None of the issues are that important or demeaning, so I don't have many thoughts about this. -
-2 for capitalization. No capitalization in the middle of a sentence for a common noun.
-1 for paragraphs. You need a new paragraph overtime someone speaks.
-4 for commas. Please refer to my comma guide.
-4 for --biggest issue--sentence structure. These were four sentences that could have been split up into eight sentences. This is because some of your sentences didn't make enough sense as a single sentence.
-1 for apostrophes.
-Note: I do feel as if the first few chapters could be combined to make one or two longer ones. --
Positives:
+2 for speaking directly to us and making us feel more involved. It is unusual to see this in writing, as it does make it look more unprofessional, but it fits with your style.
+5 for the mystery. I want to know the backstory of Lucifer. I want to know how he has all of this knowledge, and past lives? Please, please, please!!!
Overall:
A great story. I don't think there is much more to say on that. Not many problems or issues that are repeated. Ummm.... Good job.
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