Voiceless by TheMeganVictoria
Tenses: 10/10
Character opinions: 7/10
Planned out: 9/10
Book fits title & description: 10/10
Book title: 5/5
Follows: 5/5
Total: 46/50
Review: Plot is understandable and clear. The title is perfect. Your narrative is strong, although your descriptions are a bit weak. For your writing to grow, I do advise you to try your best to use more literary devices and colourful words when it comes to descriptive writing. Add those details, it makes imaginary more interesting. To intrigue your readers even more, try to use different sentence starters. I liked your plot a lot!
Shade Series Book one by apollolachanqleta
Tenses: 9/10
Character opinions: 7/10
Planned out: 5/10
Book fits title & description: 9/10
Book title: 3/5
Follows: 5/5
Total: 38/50
Review: I liked the originality of the story a lot. Although, It was hard to understand what was going on because the plot seemed unclear. A lot of parts were without relevance to the plot of the story, so you should revise to focus more on the core of your story. The paragraphs were messy, so just make sure you organize them better so then it's easier to read.
The Perfect Jade by scarlettblackdaisy
Tenses: 10/10
Character opinions: 10/10
Planned out: 8/10
Book fits title & description: 10/10
Book title: 5/5
Follows: 5/5
Total: 48/50
Review: The mystery element was prominent, and the story was brimful of thoughtful moods. I would compare it's suspense to a full, tall glass of somebody's favourite drink, making a reader want to gulp it all down. The characters were developed properly, and I had an instinctive liking towards Jade's spunky & strong character. Although, I just wanted to point out, that if you added more transitioning sentences — your writing would be beyond excellent. Such a creative story this was!
Curiosity Killed The Cat by shewantschco
Tenses: 5/10
Character Opinions: 4/10
Planned Out: 6/10
Book fits title & description: 9/10
Book title: 5/5
Follows: 5/5
Total: 34/50
Review: My favourite part of this story was the humour! It added so much personality and style into your writing. To improve, I think you need to lessen the amount of characters and focus more on developing your main characters instead. I found myself getting really confused over the plot because I didn't really see any character development which led to some plot holes. Overall, it was decent, but there's always room for more improvement. Good job. :)
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