Reviewer: taz2327
Story: My Alien Love by YzcelTheWorld
❤The first thing I noticed❤
When reading this story was it reads right off the bat like the Main Character is talking to the reader. Most professional books don't have this and I personally don't like it but it's okay for wattpad. (I mean things like "yippee" or "I mean not actually but you know".)
❤Cover❤
Your cover is cute but simple and I actually love it!! Although your faceclaim are very overused faces so I suggest finding an "unknown" face.
❤Title❤
Honestly your title fits your story but it doesn't make me want to read it. It could be simpler too.
❤Descriptions❤
In this story I think you really need to work on descriptions. Throughout the book your story sort of goes in a straight line. From one thing to the next. So it moves along really quick and a lot of things happen. I think you just need to slow down and put some depth into your descriptions and writing.
❤Flow❤
Flow is something you can't teach but a writer can pickup with practice. I think that with more time your writing flow will come together ,if you give it time, so I'm not gonna go too deep into flow.
❤What I liked❤
•Your cute plot that you've got going on.
•Your MC's personality
❤What I disliked❤
•Your story is rough to read and I understand this but it makes the enjoyment of the story hard.
•How the MC talks to herself to fill in the readers knowledge
•The first few chapters aren't that exciting and the flow is lacking.
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