Critique Book Club

Batch 2: Moon University

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-JL

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Book Title: Moon University
Author: catharsirized
Critic Made by: AkoSiN

Feed back:

∞Title:

Sabi nila, the title must be something catchy to catch the interest of the readers. They must be feel confused at nangangating i-click yung story mo for them to read. Pero, the para sa akin, yung title, may dating naman pero wala yung feels e, wala yung feels na macoconfused ka sa story na iyon na kailangan mong basahin na ano ba yung nakapaloob sa istoryang iyon? Bakit ganoon yung title niya?

∞Book cover:

The book cover, sabi rin nila, ang book cover daw ay dapat related sa story and also sa title ng story. Okay lang na simple, pero dapat yung book cover must tell something about the story. Book cover rin ang nagiging dahilan kung bakit nakakahakot ng mga readers, parang sa title lang rin, they will get confused.

∞Blurb & Prologue:

Sa blurb muna, unang-una palang, pakiramdam ko para akong nadismaya. 'cause you're spoon feeding your readers. Why not let them to know the characters and also the flow of the story, give some at least few sentences about your story and make them feel confuse and have the urge to read your story at the same time. And next sa first chapter, It would be good po if you keep your characters names and other details about them. Cause again, you're already spoon feeding your readers. Let's say si Bailey, nakilala na agad siya, then sa next chap ay eto na. Parang nawala yung thrill na makilala yung ibang characters kasi sa una palang ipinakilala mo na. Hayaan mo na yung story mismo ang mag bigay ng way kung paano maipapakilala yung characters, sana makuha ninyo po yung point kooo hehehe!

∞Characterization:

Eto, na-impressed ako kung paano mo i-describe yung characters mo. May kailangan lang na-iimprove pero minors lang, but always remember na walang perfect appearance at walang perfect na tao na walang kinakatakutan tulad lang ng sa ipis. Lol.

Plot and Settings:

Settings muna, sa pag-describe mo ng mga lugar sa story mo as a reader parang naroon na rin kami mismo sa istoryang iyon. To make it short, the narration of settings are impressive! Then next, which is the plot. Madaling ma-guess kung anong mangyayari, kaya make sa thrill and add some twist to your story, yung tipong akala nila ganoon yung mangyayari pero hindi pala.

∞Narration and Dialogues:

Maganda yung narration and also yung pag-exchange ng dialogues, but also don't forget na pahingain mo ang characters mo. Parang nabubuhay sila. Those are: bumuntong-hininga, huminga ng malalim, napasinghal, and etchetera. Btw, okay talaga siya. May Iimprove lang na kaya naman. Minors lang.

∞Your opinion not a critic but as a reader:

My opinion as a reader, your book cover is good but does it catch the attention of the readers? And also, yung grammars ninyo po nakakamangha hehehe, pero po,  medyo spoon feed na ang nangyari sa story mo. Hayaan mo na ang readers mo ang mag figure out sa mangyayari sa kwentong isinusulat mo. Btw, good job po!