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Emmiepooh2 review : Charlie & Dia

Book: Charlie & Dia 

Author: Aamenah456
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Reviewer : emmiepooh2

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Hey, aamenah! You wanted me to review your book as a whole to figure out if the book was cliché and the overall enjoyment. I did more then that, but focused on those two!

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Title: 

The title seems original being it is about the main characters (Charlie and Dia). It is something simple and fitting for the book. Honestly if it was named something else, I would probably make a comment about it needing a better title because nothing fits this book besides the name you gave it. I looked it up on wattpad and various other writing platforms, there is only ever your book (on wattpad) that uses that title!!! 

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Cover/Blurb:

The cover is very well done, however it clashes with the blurb in my opinion. I tend to think some of the ones you displayed throughout your book fits it more than the current book cover now. The blurb was well written and gave that strong hook into it. Keep up the good work for that!

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Grammar:

Your formatting for the paragraphs were overall good, structured like a book. However, you had issues at times with not splitting the paragraphs up where it was as if the paragraphs were one long chapter (though it only a a fourth of the chapter up.) When you fix that the paragraphing will be better and easier to read. 

The structure of your sentences were major not structured right. You didnt write out numbers, like you're suppose to in books. Also, you struggled with fragments such as 'Jasper raised a brow.' Think to yourself and answer in your book, how does so and so do this. If you cannot answer that to yourself, I recommend for you to remove those fragments. They interrupt the flow of your book constantly. Lastly for sentence structure, you had about five sentences (at least) that you forgot punctuation for. I hope that helps you out!

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Plot description/Character Development:

The setting wasn't clear at times, you need to show it in more detail. However, you did spectacular on character development for Charlie and Dia. It just took till the end to get enough character development for Dia, which she deserves better for that part. There is no scene that I do not recommend you to do without. We just need more details for it!

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Overall Enjoyment/Cliché (Focus points):

I enjoyed this book from chapter one, though at times you did loose me because of your grammar mistakes. Truthfully, it's an amazing story and it deserves to worked on at the fullest extent when you are available to. I would love to know more feelings between the characters and that raw emotion. It's something that would make it seem more realistic, if you done so. 

After reading this book, I thought about the previous books I have read in this genre before. Nothing is like it and it isnt cliché, it is very good and unique like said above. 

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to review your book, dear!!!

Let's thank our dear reviewer emmiepooh2 and her client for chosing us; we hope you're satisfied with the result!