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Sky_is_limit review: The Red Rose.

Bookname: The Red Rose

Author: Writer10002
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Reviewer: sky_is_limit

Hi! So, you asked me to give constructive criticism, nothing to focus on really. You also wanted my opinion on the length of the story. I didn't realize it was one part. I have to admit, I'm not seasoned in the art of flash fiction or short stories but I'll try my best. This is going to be a very short review.

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Title/Cover/Blurb

The title saturates Wattpad. With a quick search, I found a lot of other stories with the same title. Since this is a stand-alone, one chapter story, I recommend choosing a more unique title. But I do have to admit that it relates perfectly to the point of the story. The cover is very simple and I feel like it should show a rose to match the title if you stick with it. It may be a bit too bright for the tone of the story. But somehow, I think it fits. Perhaps because it's so simple which isn't a bad thing at all. I'll have to admit that I don't know how a blurb should look for a one chapter story. I'll treat it as a regular book. It's not very telling and it's short. I think it could be reworked to expose a bit more of the sadness that's shown in the actual story.

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Grammar (focus)

This needs editing, I won't lie. Some sentences don't start with capitalized letters and for me, that's very distracting. I want to note that some of the sentence structure could also be better, i.e. add proper commas in places. There's also random punctuation sometimes in between sentences. It could use a look over, especially because it's only one chapter.

Length. I think the length is perfect and I'll explain why below.

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Plot Development

Despite my initial surprise to see it was only one chapter, I think you did well. It was short and sweet which I found to be perfect. The scene played as a snapshot in your character's life, a moment of deciding to move on.

Ignoring the grammar mistakes, I think the pace was nice. The flow could be better because with some of the memories. But for the most part, I enjoyed this small snippet of sadness and getting better. I feel the length is perfect because I don't think there needs to be a whole story built around this. The plot reflects the perfect amount of anguish for the family who has just lost a member. I also feel you have the perfect amount of past mentioned to really build on the pain of the MC. Good job.

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Character Development

All I'm going to say is you do an amazing job of showing Amy's emotions. In a short time, you've shown readers what she's feeling and why.

There's really not much to say because you do the same with the parents even if they're mentioned briefly. Even with the garbage man and showing his hesitation to grab the box. Well done.

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Overall Enjoyment

I loved this. It was a very nice read and something mellow that still managed to tug on my heartstrings. I really don't have much to say because, for the most part, this was perfect.

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Advice

Genuinely, just edit the chapter heavily. It could use a lot of work and I think once it's edited, it'll be a masterpiece. At the moment, it's your only downfall.

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A short one but we are equally thankful to Sky for this review and to her customer, for trusting her. We hope you like your review.

Remember, your book is amazing♡