FANFICTION REVIEWS

THE RESIDENTS II KSJ SMUT

REVIEW#64

GENRE: FANFICTION, ROMANCE

BY:  MissJinButt
STATUS: ONGOING
RATE: 7/10
CONTAINING: MATURE SCENE, boyxgirl, doctor!au, Idol!au

REVIEW:

I was smirking when I saw the title of the book and I couldn't help to think that it was going to get down very quickly and I was correct, it was not even the fifth chapter and we had Jin-

Alright, since it's Ramadan for all the Muslim (By the time I'm updating this) people I don't advise you to read this, and the people who are not comfortable with it I don't even recommend you to read it either, I hope my warning will be enough and if it's not enough then the tittle will.

Now I would like to advise the writer of the book a few aspects of the book that I think it's a bit lacking and thought if you improve you will be much more better.

First I will like to tell the author about punctuation usage, I get that you want to end a certain sentence but be mindful that not every full stop sentence must use a full stop. I'm no punctuation expert and I'm still learning myself but I think it's better if you be mindful of it, instead of putting a full stop use comma or you can skip so it wouldn't be one big paragraph.

Second, I notice that you put a bit narration on the story, I thought that it was alright if you want to put a narration but you don't really need to put a ' () ' on every paragraph of narration of the story, The narration itself is a part of the story so it will be better if you don't use it. I also notice you put on the characters thoughts on the book, I think you also don't need a '()' people usually put it on bold or underline it.

But despite all of that I think the plot is really good, I'm use to read a idolxmakeupartist au instead a doctorxidol au so I think it will be interesting and who am I kidding, a bit smut will make it better, so I think it's going to be a good plot to write, with a few adjustments on the punctuation I think the author will be set to write a great story.