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BOOK TITLE: The Mono Odyssey AUTHOR: Avistelle RATINGS: 9.8 / 10
TITLE:
I loved your title. It's very interesting! :'))
BOOK COVER:
Daebak^^ I liked the book cover very much. Maganda dahil dating palang niya alam mo ng Fantasy about God and Goddesses.
It catched my eyes, it attracted me, therefore i wanted to read it lalo na first love ko din ang may mga kinalaman sa Greek Myths. So, it suit the genre Fantasy/Mystery.
BLURB / SYNOPSIS:
Honestly, your Synopsis satisfied me. Wala akong nakitang problema, mapapaisip talaga ang mga magbabasa kung anong mangyayari kay Erika.
CHARACTERIZATION:
Good wala rin akong nakitang problema dito. Maayos na maayos ang bawat pag characterize mo sa mga characters.
DIALOGUE AND NARRATIONS:
There's no problem in here. Your character dialogue are writen well. Also your narrate so well! Talo mo pa nga 'ko kung tutuusin.
Keep on expanding your skills in writing. Remeber 'show, don't tell.' Always include the senses: sight, hearing, smell, feel, taste, etc. To help us imagine the words in to real life. Describing the aura and emotion kahit nag insert ka ng mga pictures. Daebak! Kuhang kuha mo lahat. Thumbs up to you!
GRAMMATICAL AND TYPO ERRORS
Halos wala akong nakita talaga. Just keep on revising and re-reading your story para malaman mo kung tama ba ang choice of words mo. May mga napansin kasi akong mga nag kukulang sa letra.
OWN OPINION:
I loved fantasy lalo na pag may kinalaman sa Greek Mtyhs kaya inaamin kong nag enjoy ako sa pagbabasa ng story mo. Exciting siya kada chapter kasi eto yung tipong hindi mo mahuhuluan ang susunod na mga mang-yayari, sana hindi mawala ang thrill sa mga susunod na update. Sakto din ang haba ng bawat chapters 'di tulad ng ibang maiikli at sobrang haba. Isang normal na tao pa ang bida sa una, kaya makakarelate ang bawat mambabasa tapos bigla nalang siyang napunta sa ibang world, awesome!
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hindi po kasi siya catchy.
Halos wala naman po akong nakitang errors, malinis at mukang nahasa na. We can't be the 'best' in short of time so, it means you are going to improve and to improve. I liked your story kaya subaybayan ko na siya, i-shashare ko din siya sa kawpa ko wattpader/dian, ilalagay ko rin siya sa reading list namin. Don't loose hope in writing kung alam mong kaya mo, kaya mo. Trust yourself and Trust God. Sana nakatulong ako kahit papaano. (kahit wala naman akong masyadong nasabi haha)
