BOOK TITLE: In A Garden Full Of Eve
AUTHOR: @detbadetba
RATINGS: 8/10
TITLE:
Hindi pamigay. Sobrang unique ng title. Hindi ko maisip ang mangyayari sa plot.
BOOK COVER:
Maganda rin.
BLURB / SYNOPSIS:
Maganda simple.
CHARACTERIZATION:
Wala naman akong napansin na problema dito.
DIALOGUE AND NARRATION:
It is always important to set the mood at the beginning. You should always start with a hook in writing short stories. Sa simula ay hindi ko alam kung ano ang patutunguhan ng kwento. I can only guess.
But if I’m only a simple reader and not a critique, I won’t read the book because the beginning did not hook me to read more.
Maganda rin ang dialogue mo sa tingin ko ay nasa probinsya sila kaya maganda na ginagamit mo talaga ang accent nila.
GRAMMATICAL AND TYPO ERRORS:
Wala akong napansin.
ADVICE, THOUGHTS:
Setting is always a must. Let your characters move using their setting. Hindi malalaman ng mambabasa kung nasaan ang karakter kung hindi mo ilalarawan. You can draw their house, and other places so you can come up with a better description of the setting. You can also search the web for interiors.
OWN OPINION:
Natuwa ako sa batangas accent nila. Sa Quezon Province kasi ay ganoon din ang ginagamit.
Maganda kang magsulat. Maganda ang plot mo. Ang writing style mo ay maganda at naaayon. You only need to hook your readers.
I'm giving feedback based on my own liking / preferences and writing rules. I'm only giving feedback based on the technicalities of writing and if it catches my interest. Plot wise your story is great because it's your own idea, beliefs, and experience. It's a part of you. Keep the passion burning!
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