Soju Writers Critique Shop

TO FALL AGAIN

BOOK TITLE: To Fall Again
AUTHOR: @glymerous
RATINGS: 8 / 10

TITLE:

Direct and simple title. You can easily tell that it's a love story which is a good point.

BOOK COVER:

Nice cover

BLURB / SYNOPSIS:

Improve the last three sentences. Summarize the early part of your story then give a cliff hanger vibe in the last sentence/s. You should narrate in the description part because this is what the readers read first before choosing to proceed on your story.

CHARACTERIZATION:

You describe your characters well. I kind of find it off in the introduction since it's just a glimpse but as the story progresses, you really did well.

I also kind of feel a little jonaxx vibe in your characters.

GRAMMATICAL AND TYPO ERRORS:

There are but it's natural for writers. You just need to proofread on your most convenient time.

OWN OPINION:

- INTRO - There's just too many moments that she's talking to her inner self.
- The hook in the end of Simula got me. I only want you to improve the earlier parts.
- Describe the setting. Ano yung nakikita ng mata ni Iris?
- You should relate to your characters. Imagine being on their shoes. Think of a similar experience that happened to you then correlate. It can help you picture out the scene and create more realistic dialogues. (I am referring to simple conversations)

GOOD POINTS:

-You are good at showing the emotions of your character. I admired you for that because I think it's my weakness.
-You are good in describing your characters actions.
-I personally like your writing style.

I'm giving feedback based on my own liking / preferences and writing rules. I'm only giving feedback based on the technicalities of writing and if it catches my interest. Plot wise your story is great because it's your own idea, beliefs, and experience. It's a part of you. Keep the passion burning!

CRITIC BY: si-huli

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