BOOK TITLE: The Eye of the Past
AUTHOR: @Jan_Green
RATINGS: 9 /10
TITLE:
It looked interesting enough at the first glance. Wala akong masabi pero title palang nakuha mo na ako. Good job for having such a unique title! :'))
BOOK COVER:
Maganda ang book cover mo, fit na fit sa story mo. Regards sa gumawa.
BLURB / SYNOPSIS:
Pretty interesting Synopsis! I loved it. May relevance ito sa title mo and i can also see na may mystery effect talaga ito.
CHARACTERIZATION:
Good wala akong makitang problema dito.
DIALOG AND NARRATION:
There's no problem in your dialogue. I loved the way you narrated what the characters truly feels.
GRAMMATICAL AND TYPO ERRORS:
Wala naman akong masyadong nakita. Medyo naguluhan lang ako sa part na:
Umupo siya sa semento habang nakataas parin ang dalawang kamay. Nangangatog ang katawan niya, hindi dahil sa lamig kundi sa takot. Nagniningning ang mga mata niya habang nakatitig sa'kin.
What do you mean 'nagniningning?'
Overall i don't see any mistakes/errors. It's great how you use your comfortability in writting.
OWN OPINION:
Keep on revising and re-reading your story para malaman mo kung tama ba ang choice of words mo at kung may iilan kang typo. You're good in writing, malinis at mukhang nahasa na so keep it up! Maganda rin ang story mo kaya i-aad ko siya sa reading list namin.
P.S: Keep it up and Keep writing. Trust yourself and Trust in God dahil siya ang gagabay sa'yo. I hope i helped. Good luck! Soju writers wanted to say.
CRITIC BY: SimplyJeltasya
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