Dragons: The New Chief

Thank You! Second Book? and Questions!

Firstly, I want to thank you for reading, commenting and voting, ya'll make my day! You are so very kind and sweet, making me feel all warm and fuzzy inside whenever I read your comments.

You know, just a year ago I talked shit about fan fictions...yes, I was one of them. I absolutely despised the though of taking something away from the story and tweaking with it. I still have my preferences, like I do not do AU's or anything that drastically changes from the proper story, like giant Hiccup's or having the character die and/or kill each other when it's a children's story (But that's just me, I don't judge...people have their fetishes), one of the reasons why I didn't not go into much detail when it came to doing the do and the battle...I thought some people would appreciate their heads not being screwed with. I can't see Hiccup as a killer, but you know it's bound to happen, he's a viking! It's and occupational hazard! LOL Which is why, if some of you didn't catch on, Hiccup did not hang the last of the raider's, Eret took them back to their island. Hiccup just acted like he was because he had to look the part of chief. That has to be one of my favorite parts in the book, that and the scene where Stoick's apparition touches Hiccup's shoulder and tells Hiccup that his daughter is perfect. <3

I really want to know your opinions on my writing, since it's what I want to do for a living someday. I know some of you may be a little young to understand, but this is something that is very near and dear to me. I have always been told I had the writing capability of a University Graduate, and thats just when I'm trying to bull shit my way through a writing assignment for school I have no clue about. (I know, I know, I'm gloating, but it's the truth!) Writing is a chore, as chore that you want to do but no less hard, if not harder. 24/7 I am constantly running ideas through my head. What about this idea? What about this character? What about this scene? I am always carrying a notebook with me because I do not want to be caught without one. Trust me, if you do, it sucks, especially when you've got so many ideas flitting back and forth. Just FYI, so you know how serious I am about my writing, I have a total of 12 books in my head right at this moment (Not including fan fictions); 6 of which are one entire series that I have put my total faith into, which is why it is not posted on Wattpad. I have been planning to attempt to publish it either later this year of even the next, but first things first is finding an agent... Anybody out there got connections??? Hahaha well, probably not... Anyways, it took a lot of effort to write this, many late nights (It's even 12:30 AM when I'm writing this), sitting in front of my iPad frustrated because I couldn't get my ideas to flow, so I would like some criticism, you know, to make me better at what I do.

This is my first time writing in third person, usually I write in first, for my originals, because they are character central stories while this was plot central, so this was a change for me. So here are a few questions I would like to ask you.

Does anyone feel that the song on the previous chapter was familiar? Go on and take a guess, I'll tell you about it a little later on....

Was I good at portraying the third person?

Did I switch around voices? Like, did I fall out of the passive and into the present tense at any given moment?

What is your favorite chapter, by far, and why?

How well did I portray the characters? Was I able to get Hiccup's goofiness and Tuffnut's stupidness in there correctly?

How did I do with set up and pay off? Or better known as foreshadowing? Was it too obvious? Was it not noticeable enough?

How did I do with the 'show don't tell' aspect? Did I convey emotions and reactions to where you could feel them yourself? Did I make you cry? Did I make you feel the anger, sadness, happiness, etc. that was spoken of in the chapters? I have been writing for about 5 years, and in the time completed two books, half of one and a quarter of another; I am still working on elaboration in my stories.

How about word choice? Was it too plain and simple, or was I able to get some colorful vocabulary in there? (I'm the kind of person who would take hours just to find the right word for a minuscule sentence.)

Is there anything else that you would like to point out that may need some working on that I missed in my questions?

I will be revising this at some point, so petty things like spelling and grammar aren't my concern right now; I will get to them later on.

As for the song in the previous chapter, it is called Rise of the Dragons by Peter Crowley (One of the best composers next to Brunuhville, Two Steps from Hell, Adrian Von Ziegler, and a whole bunch I know i'm missing). He made that in tribute to one of his favorite movies...which one you ask? Well that would be How to Train Your Dragon of course!!! That is why it probably sounds a little familiar to you. ;)

Also, if there is anything you want to ask me, feel free! Personal or writing alike.

Before you start blasting that one question, I don't know when yet, it may be a few months before I can even get started as I have other priorities. I was never planning on it in the beginning, but as the story continued on I realized that I, unintentionally, set up the foundations for another story, so yes, I am going to be writing a sequel.