Major problem.
Have you ever seen a story that goes like this?
harry styles:
Um why is that man holding my bbz's hand
gary golden:
Um ye why is this man holding my hand
liam payne:
Im holding her hand sksbksbd d omf
Like no. Please stop right there because no one likes that (unless it's a messaging book like "Kik").
You see, that makes the story look bland like the steak Gordon Ramsay rejected.
You get me?
Add a little spice to the POV's, and for the love of God, don't only have one paragraph per POV.
Well if you're writing in Third Person POV, I don't think you have much of a problem there. Unless your book looks like this:
1:
I
Like
Luke
Hemmings
Ya feel?
2:
I
Am
Trying
To
Be
Poetic
3:
Pasta
Leprechaun
Sender
Superhero
Tinker Bell
Ominous
Pinky
Now read the first letters of the third set's "poems".
But...
Some of the books I've read are like:
"hey" she told him
"Oi" he said back
we kissed and i felt sparks *bom*
Like c'mon, try to apply some effort?
Uhm, alright, this chapter just trailed off and turned into some crappy fanfiction examples.
Goodbye for now!
