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•: Title - 3.5/5
The Crypt of Lysidamus does strike a mystery, thriller vibe. Definitely good in the ears. But I did have some initial difficulty while pronouncing Lysidamus. Of course, that's only my side. As of now, the title seems to give a good impression.
•: Blurb - 4/5 I'd say it was a tad bit long for a blurb. But, since it was doing well enough to induce some mystery, I haven't reduced much. In the second part, however, I felt like the names were being repeated often. Aaelia could be replaced with the pronoun - 'she'. That would definitely sound better, in my opinion.
•: First Impression - 8.5/10 Right off the bat, I could say that I was pretty impressed with how the story seemed to build up the mystery. The blurb was well structured. And the prologue was intriguing and descriptive. In addition to that, the introduction given about the king and the queen was a necessary part that really stood out to me. Well done!
•: Grammar - 9.5/10 I needn't say much about this. Your grammar is pretty good and your base is strong, strong, strong. I don't think this part needs any more elaboration.
•: Plot - 8.5/10 Because I'd heard the plot, in advance, to this submission, I was pretty sure of what to write here. The plot with Cien and his life is intriguing, to say the least. I would say this is a pretty complex plot, so that will make it difficult for readers who have left in the middle to retrace the plot points back. Another thing is - your execution is dope. I like how everything is structured and flows smooth. It's almost like someone telling a story. You have introduction to the place, the plot, why things have been happening... There are no grey plot points so far.
•: Characters - 9/10 This is where I wanted to point out something. Just in the first chapter, I don't think the king and queen needed any descriptions; but I would've loved to read it, regardless. Otherwise, all other characters were planned well. I did have trouble memorizing them, initially... But now, it's fine. I can't say anyone except Cien will be remembered by-heart by me, however. I kind of have a preference for Cien Morris.
•: Dialogue Delivery - 8/10 There were a few parts where I felt the dialogues seemed forced. The conversation did flow smooth, but then there would be one point where the conversation stopped, and then it would become a little rigid.
•: Flow - 3.5/5 There were areas where I felt that the situation seemed slow. Even though it didn't dampen the interest, I felt this was worth mentioning.
•: Final Impressions - 5/5 It is one of the books that I will find myself wanting to finish... so, it deserves a full credit here.
Total - 59.5/70
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