Divorce Attorney Mr. Park - Seong_Grace
•: Title - 3/5
It was a to-the-point title. It definitely involved with the plot, and it was fitting rather, thinking how the plot has everything to do with Park Jimin as the attorney.•: Blurb - 3.5/5
The blurb was pretty crisp, I'd say. It was just the right length and it conveyed exactly what the story contained.•: First Impression - 5/10
The prologue and the first impression actually felt a little watered down.
Firstly, the banners were conflicting. The blue hazy banner, fits the theme. So does the other dark shaded one. But stick to using just one color scheme. The blue and black are actually conflicting. Secondly, the grammar needs work. This will come through practice and more reading, so make sure to do that. Thirdly, presentation. When different speakers are speaking, make sure to put them in different paragraphs so they aren't confusing.•: Grammar - 5/10
It definitely needs work. There are places where you've aced the entire essence into a perfectly written sentence. But there are also instances where your entire sentence seemed odd just because of the structure. The latter should never pop up.•: Plot - 6/10
The plot is actually a tad bit common. Though the events as such may not be replicated, it is still common. There are areas that felt like they needed more elaboration. Even if it is narrated by the in third person, it does require you to elaborate more on all characters at the same level. When Y/N was in the hospital, her emotions were described in a maximum of one sentence. There was one point that seemed a little unrealistic - Y/N entering into a marriage before her divorce has been granted. I hope you understand what I meant here.•: Characters - 6/10
Actually, there are well thought of. As of chapter 10, there was not much change in Jungkook apart from him rethinking about the consequences of his actions. Jimin's character introduction was sped through. It felt very mild compared to how Jungkook was introduced. Y/N had changes after living separately from Jungkook, but fear and trauma that had been inflicted upon her remained unexplained - as in, it was very meagre.•: Dialogue Delivery - 5/10
This needs improvement. Most of your dialogues make sense, but they lack the structural execution. And in addition to that, there were quite a few typos here and there as well. Most dialogues feel forced and not natural. The happiness when people call Jimin 'Mochi' seems a little unreal. Make it a maximum of 2-3 sentences per person, in the conversation. If they're speaking more, put it in a different paragraph altogether.•: Flow - 2/5
It was fast. I can't say anything else. There were a lot of events that happened in short chapters of 10. I think, you could slow down a bit.•: Final Impressions - 3/5
It definitely has the potential, and I actually read your 11th chapter too. Though, I do suggest you to edit it real fast, and add some substantial descriptions - be it about the room, the environment, the people.Total - 38.5/70
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