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•: Title - 4.5/5 In short, I actually liked the title. The title is definitely unique and it did drive me to start reading right away.
•: Blurb - 3.5/5 I felt the blurb was pretty decent. It, again, aims at something for the adult audience, but it was fine. I'm guessing this would be the main focus in the book too.
•: First Impression - 8/10 It was great! Like I mentioned towards the end of the chapter, there were small typos and inconsistency in capitalising the first alphabets. It definitely sets a bar higher than the previous book of yours that I'd reviewed, making it clear that you definitely have improved. • one thing I wanted you to know is that try to use less instances of repeated words. There's a lot of 'smirk' in just one chapter. Instead, show how else that could've been described. There could be a 'glint in her eye', 'an evil motion in her mind'.
•: Grammar - 6.5/10 There are still places where the grammar needs work. I would definitely suggest editing it. It wasn't exactly minimal, but if I set myself to ignore it, I could. But it's better not to, so you can deliver your best work. • please note: learn more about the past tense. I've seen nuances where you've mentioned 'did gone'. 'Did go' is the right form. • do put in some time to know the perfect sentence structure.
•: Plot - 8.5/10 The plot is going great. It's intriguing and has just enough to keep us entertained. It's offbeat, and the execution is unique. Great job!
•: Characters - 8.5/10 There was actually a lot of depth to most characters. But there was one thing I wanted to mention - kids usually don't know of a word 'psychopath'. Y/N would imagine her mother to be cruel, or a beast in her life, but probably not a psychopath. Not unless she's a tween or teen. And there was one chapter when you've written thrice that 'she knew her mother was a psycho'. So, yeah.
•: Dialogue Delivery - 7.5/10 There are grammatical errors in dialogues. I wouldn't say they seem natural in that way. So... You know what you've to work on.
•: Flow - 4/5 I think the flow was pretty good. But I do feel the pictures in the chapters cut the reading flow. Even if you are planning to include such images, for better preview, you could make them of the same width.
•: Final Impressions - 4/5 It is great! I'd love to see it reach new heights.
Total - 55/70
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