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Lost Love = Misery 🌟

Lost Love = Misery - ajroker

•: Title - 3.5/5
The title was pretty unique, especially with mathematical symbols and all. The title seemed justified for your story as per your blurb - it gave off just enough for readers to be curious and give your book a try.

•: Blurb - 3.5/5
I think the blurb was alright. I wouldn't say it surprised me enough to get impatient about reading the book, but it was compelling - I'll give you that. The part about Ethan being a bad boy and how his life has changed after Sophia was expected. But, there's nothing you need to change about the blurb. Though, there was a slight error I found - 'her from wealth'. It didn't feel right when I read through it, something felt off about the structure of that phrase. So, maybe you could change that.

•: First Impression - 7/10
The first impression with the cover and the blurb was good, even though I did feel the cover could be changed to show Ethan or other characters, or just to show the vibe of the story (I know that single dried flower also shows despair, but I'm just stating my opinion). This part also includes the first chapter; and I felt that the introduction was good, but the back-to-back flashback and present time didn't really work for me. It felt a little over the place, if you understand what I mean. Instead, I'd suggest you to shift from flashbacks to present time for a maximum of 2 times a chapter, so that the flow isn't disrupted.

•: Grammar - 8.5/10
I actually found a few places where there were issues with the grammar. Throughout the majority of the story, the grammar remained consistent and flowy. But these few places had typos and sentence structure that just didn't sound right. This can definitely be avoided by editing the chapters once, thoroughly.

•: Plot - 8.5/10
I'll give it to you. The plot is great. It does deal with a well-known trope, but it had a different execution. I liked how slow it was, how Ethan found his solace in love and finally found someone for himself. It was kind of sweet, a fresh book that I definitely needed to read. Thank you for this!

•: Characters - 7.5/10
This is one place I wanted to say that you'd mentioned Ethan as a bad boy - but I didn't find much of his "bad" boy part justified. As off my reading, I would say he's a sweet, honest and thoughtful guy who still hasn't healed from past scars. Julia was a fresh, and straightforward character and so were the friends: always so caring.
I really did want answers for why Sophia did what she did, but that's fine. Maybe because it was a short story, you couldn't delve deep into it... But if you could, maybe add an epilogue with her point-of-view - because at one point, Sophia cared about Ethan too.

•: Dialogue Delivery - 7.5/10
There were a few parts where I felt the dialogues seemed forced. Especially in that chapter where Ethan is on a date with Julia (a double date with his friends) there were parts that didn't seem like they were enjoying themselves on the date, but attending an interview for a job. That is the only part I found an issue.

•: Flow - 4.5/5
The flow was good throughout the story. All areas were decently paced and you had just enough descriptions for each and every scene. Pretty good!

•: Final Impressions - 4.5/5
It is most definitely a book that I liked. It was fresh and deviant from the typical books we find on Wattpad. Though, I would advice you to not use a lot of brands while writing - Nike hat, Apple watch, and such. As a reader, it doesn't appeal to me. Or maybe it's because most books I read don't contain such descriptions, but this was my opinion.

Total - 55/70