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•: Title - 4/5 I actually liked how unique this is. But I couldn't exactly draw the connection on the word 'chronicles' - after reading the blurb. I got the connection to the midnight, but not the chronicle part.
•: Blurb - 3.5/5 The blurb was well formed. It was pretty intriguing and did reel me in. So, good job!
•: First Impression - 7/10 It seemed promising. I liked how the prologue showed what was shown in the blurb, as an introduction. It had one place where your tense wasn't right, but that can be edited out. Otherwise, I actually liked the whole outlook.
•: Grammar - 7/10 Needs work. Though it has improved a bit, it still needs work. Most sentences seem wordy and some even took me 3-4 reads to figure them out.
•: Plot - 8/10 Plot was fine. The idea is definitely good. But the execution really needs work. Off the prologue I really thought it was going to be some crime thriller. But the initial 3 chapters really provided me with something different. The build up was slow, yet towards the end you reached the plot point.
•: Characters - 5/10 There were places where I couldn't exactly understand Y/N's rebellion. Yes, of course, she isn't going to be an obedient little girl of 20, who's just going to follow what everyone tells her to. But somewhere, something felt offended about it. Maybe it was the execution, or maybe it was the fast pace, but many a times her character felt unnatural. Others, to some extend were fine, but they all seemed 2D, regardless. Especially Jungkook and Jimin. Not much of a character arc in process. I felt that them complying to Y/N's wish to be free seemed too sudden. Usually, even if friends do agree to keep a certain distance if you think they're being too controlling; they wouldn't exactly agree to your sudden one-night-relationship, off the bat.
•: Dialogue Delivery - 5/10 There are grammatical errors here which really take out the fun from seeing the characters alive in the book. The dialogue quotations at the end of it too are basic, rather. There's so many synonyms and actions you can include there. So that may diversify and make it unique.
•: Flow - 2/5 It was incredibly fast. Before a reader could possibly try to comprehend the situation, it just shifts to a whole new focus. I think pacing down, would be the wisest thing to do with your story.
•: Final Impressions - 3.5/5 It is definitely not low on potential. Execution needs work and so does the personas of characters.
Total - 45/70
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