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•: Title - 4/5 In short, I actually liked the title. The title definitely captures the true essence of the story.
•: Blurb - 3/5 Blurb was short and crisp. It didn't have much given away, but I did feel like it could've been better. It gave the definition of an incubus, and a quote from the book. I would've rather prefered the definition within the introduction part of the book, and a little more plot-substance in the blurb.
•: First Impression - 7/10 It did give off a good first impression. However the cover actually seemed a little too light for my liking. It included darker themes, so I think a darker scheme would've been more perfect. This actually gives an actual 'midsummer' fresh vibe.
•: Grammar - 9.5/10 I needn't say much about this. Your grammar is pretty good and your base is strong, strong, strong. I don't think this part needs any more elaboration.
•: Plot - 8.5/10 Because it was a short story, I'm actually glad I didn't have to sit much to understand this. The first chapter itself was explanatory enough. I feel like "deflowering", "flower between her legs" seemed to actually make the incubus a softer person than I'd imagined. I'd actually initially thought that an incubus must be crude, a tough person, one who doesn't own an ounce of softness in them. But this set right that misconception. Spoiler ahead, sorry; but I'd actually assumed that Bierra was initially a schizophrenic and she'd imagined all of it - even the boy. But then I read the next chapter and it cleared up my misunderstood idea.
•: Characters - 7/10 There isn't actually much to assess. The first chapter was narrated by the incubus and the second was by the narrator. The incubus was done pretty well, but there wasn't much about Bierra's origins in the plot. It came afterwards as an explanation, right? I think, with your ornate writing this is actually the maximum one could do. But I still would've loved to see a little bit of the characters visually.
•: Dialogue Delivery - 9/10 There were very few dialogues to assess. So I don't know much here.
•: Flow - 3.5/5 The places where the incubus was feeling aroused and ready to take matters into their own hands was actually pretty well flowing.
•: Final Impressions - 4/5 It is one of the books that I found here with pretty good writing!
Total - 55.5/70
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