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Title: It sounds very interesting, anyone that finds your book would probably immediately relate, because life is rollercoaster full of ups and downs, sad and happy moments so I do like your title
Cover: Your book cover matches the title, the dark colours and the girl sitting there with her head buried between her knees shows the raw emotion of the word sad, it brings the whole book to light however I would suggest that you add your name on the cover it's like a book mark so that no one can copy it, you can add it to the right side of your book, I like the font used it stands out.
Blurb: Your blurb is too plain and vague, it's only one line that doesn't even give atleast a glimpse about what the characters will face or go through, as a reader it pushes one away because the blurb is another reason people read books, they look forward to seeing and continuing forward after reading the blurb I can give you a few suggestions. "Life is so much more powerful than death" some people come into our lives to build us, others to comfort and care , others to lift us and yet I faced none of the above could there be more to life? After this you could explain your character and what she goes through without giving off too much This is something I just wrote off the top of my head, I'm not saying use it but it gives more content on what could possibly happen in the book.
Pace: Your book is way too fast moving, we can rarely even interact with the main character and have sympathy towards her. Writing in third person can be very tricky and has disadvantages, and with the type of book you're writing, we want to experience her raw emotions and feel what she's feeling, go through it with her so first person would have done the trick, but if you want to continue in third person then it could also work, however it's confusing because there's no mention of names so when it's addressed as crush and former crush it confuses people so just make sure to correct that.
Writing style: Just make sure to make your transitions into the next day or next scene smoother, some scenes are way to short and need to be extended, chapter one is one year and then the next chapter is the next year without even us having connected with her in the beginning
Plot: There isn't a plot as yet seeing that your book is only two chapters in but I really hope that your character prevails all the bullying and being harassed and comes out victorious.
Overall enjoyment: Your book has great potential, you just need to work on the few bits of it, just fix the areas that I touched on and you'll be good to go!
Thank you for choosing me to be your reviewer
Yours truly Zeliie || Diverselyunique
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