As a reader, there are things I will judge heavily (and not so heavily) when deciding what to read.
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Any parts in your book that occur before the first chapter
The first chapter is a make it or break it for me...
I started this critique at 5am. I thought my alarm was set for 6am but forgot that we had one still going for Saturday at 4:30 from last week. Dammit.
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First chapter
Overall appearence
Correct dialog punctuation!
Original first chapter!
Hooray!
Breakdown
Yes, there are a few mistakes, but they don't detract from the words or what those words create. Nothing distracts me from the story.
Spelling and punctuation
'Panting in his neck' Not sure how this is meant to sound.
Likability
With this not being a genre I read, the character's were enjoyable without feeling like I was being bombarded with personality traits or info.
Final grade and final thoughts
See 'Breakdown'. This is a great balance you have here. You jump right into the story without anything feeling rushed. You introduce the love interest without it feeling like the story is being thrown at us at full speed.
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