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~ Poems of Insanity's Bliss

Reviewer: flyme2them00n

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Poems of Insanity's Bliss

By Caramelapple99

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • Not bad. I don't see anything particularly wrong with it. I honestly don't think it's the best but I don't have any pointers to help you, unfortunately. If you'd like you can ask around the Wattpad community for tips.

Blurb • It doesn't explain much as it is only one sentence long. I think you could reword it a little instead of leaving it as what it is now. The word "insane" can have different meanings when used correctly, and in your blurb it could mean actually insane or really cool insane. You could make it longer and more enticing by throwing in a few adjectives and spicing it up. Remember, story blurbs are supposed to draw the reader in and make them want to read your book.

Title • Again, not much I can comment on. It's not super striking, but it's most definitely not boring. If I were you I'd keep it.

Descriptions

Your descriptions aren't bad. You include lots of imagery that help me visualize what you're writing. You use a couple words that I never see anyone use like ichor. Your extensive vocabulary and your knowledge of poetic devices are awesome! 

Characters

I know that poetry doesn't usually have characters within them, but I'll be judging more on the character of the poetry itself. It seems like all of the poems in this collection are about the same person. Now, I don't know if they're meant to be like that, but if that was what you were intending to do, great job! If not, I suggest that you mix up the types of insanity you're trying to portray. As you may know, insanity doesn't have to be physically tearing things apart and laughing maniacally at the sight of blood. Insanity can be staying up late because you hear noises. It can be losing your temper over that kid tapping his foot across the classroom. If you wish to delve into more than just teeth-to-flesh insanity, definitely give this a shot. However, you can do whatever you wish.

Plot/General Writing

Your writing is very good. I like the idea of what you're portraying. Like I mentioned above they seem to be about the same person and the same type of insanity, but that may be what you were going for. It's not bad at all and I kinda like it!

Grammar

Overall your grammar is outstanding. However, I'd like to point out that some of your rhyming words don't actually rhyme, such as "chuckle" and "ichor". I understand that finding words that rhyme with each other is hard; I will admit that is one of the reasons why I don't write poetry with rhyme schemes. It'd be a good improvement to your already good poetry, though. It'd be a smoother read without that jolt of "Oh, none of this rhymes very well."

Reader Engagement

I will admit that I wasn't very eager to read on, but that is one hundred percent my fault because I'm not super into the whole insanity thing. But from a fair, unbiased point of view, I think it's a great read!

Overall

3.5 stars out of 5

I totally see where you want to go with this and it's really cool! I've got themed poetry too, and I feel it's really fun to write under specific themes. You've got so much potential. Keep it up!

Good luck, lollipop!