~Ready, Set, Love

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by LollipopHQ

by LollipopHQ

Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Ready, Set, Love

By @FreeHerThoughts

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • The cover is decent. But it's not especially eye catching. It works and I can read everything, but I recommend you get another since it's a little bland. Also, the words would be better if they stood out more. If you need a cover, check out the Lollipop Covers or my
personal cover shop Murderous.

Blurb • The blurb didn't really interest me. I felt neutral when reading it, and it didn't really raise a large question that made me wish to read. It just felt boring. Also, a few grammatical mistakes were present.

Title • I like the title. I don't feel like it needs to change.

Descriptions
This story had very beautiful descriptions. I could picture everything very clearly and I enjoyed it thoroughly. Great job. However, maybe do a bit more with scenery.

Characters

I really enjoyed the characters. They contrasted well, and the personalities really shone. Seriously, I saw no flaw with the characters. I enjoyed them. Also, I like how Maddox in the prologue had the mindset of manliness and what is and what isn't. It really shows what kind of character he is in the future. The mc is also very enjoyable, and I like the occasional well placed swear.

Plot/General Writing
The plot was good. I enjoyed to read the mc with her job, and it doesn't seem to be a cliche af story. That's hard to manage with romance, but you managed. Also, the pacing was great. Not too fast or slow. I felt like I understood everything at the pace but wasn't bored. I didn't see any awkward sentences.

Grammar

The grammar was almost perfect. Almost. You have a very light problem with a lack of commas. Usually, it's stellar. But I found around two to four places per chapter that needed a comma. Still, it's hard to notice when sucked into the story.

Reader Engagement

I was highly engaged. It surprised me, as I typically don't like this genre. Good job. However, I wouldn't have clicked on this great story due to ten exterior. Seriously, change the blurb and cover to do this story justice. The story is good.

Overall

It's a really great story that I recommend. I enjoyed the chapters I read, and you have very few issues. Just work on the blurb and go to a cover shop for a better cover, and you're all set.

4 of stars out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!