~Here and Gone

46 1 11

by LollipopHQ

by LollipopHQ

Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Here and Gone

By @Beautifully-Broken_

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • I dislike the cover. It's way too dark, and it's difficult to make out the words on it. It doesn't especially make me wish to start this book, and it causes me to squint. If you want a new cover, which I recommend, try the lollipop cover shop or my personal cover shop Murderous.

Blurb • I don't like one sentence blurbs. Yes, it's poetry. It's hard to make a long blurb on poetry. However, you should be able to make the story interesting and detail a little better. Or just make poetry seem really great with cool wording or something. This just didn't catch my attention.

Title • I like the title. It works well. However, remove the part that had poetry in brackets. It's obviously poetry since it's labeled as such. It's unnecessary to have it in the title too.

Descriptions

Poetry is a little hard to judge for description, as it's meant to be a lot in a little space. From what I read, descriptions were used when needed, and I could visualize what was necessary for the sake of the poem.

Characters

N/A since they all seemed to be different people. Maybe not, but that's how I saw it.

Plot/General Writing

N/A for plot. The poetry didn't seem to have a plot like some does. For writing, I found a few awkward places in the poetry when reading. It'd flow nicely with rhymes, but multiple times would come where it ended and the whole thing would suddenly stop for a little while. This irritated me.

Grammar

The grammar was really good. I only saw one mistake with a comma.

Reader Engagement

I wasn't really engaged when reading. First, I found have picked up this book due to the exterior. After that, the poetry bored me. I typically love poetry, but this seemed flat.

Overall

The poems definitely have potential. Just work out the interest a bit. Also, I highly recommend you change the cover. Really highly.

2'of stars out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!