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Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Arcana

By @windstruck07

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • The cover is really nice. I actually really liked it. Nothing about it needs to change on my opinion, as it already looks good.

Blurb • The blurb works well for the story. It doesn't reveal too much, but it reveals enough. I might've seen a small grammatical error or two, but nothing big.

Title • The title is good. Out of convenience, I didn't write the whole thing and just wrote the book title, not series with it. But since it's part of a series, the simplistic name works.

Descriptions

When I began reading, the descriptions were the first thing I noticed. They are really good and detailed. Nothing is really left out. The scenery and character designs are well described, and the fight scenes were great. Honestly, I really enjoyed the fighting.

Characters

I enjoyed the characters. First, I love the names. They sound great. Second, the descriptions are great. I know what they look like, so I'm happy. But the whole design for them fit well. Now, their personalities work really nicely too. I could easily hear their voices, and I enjoy that the twins are almost opposites. I don't have any complaints about the characters.

Plot/General Writing

I saw that you don't have English as a first language, but I could honestly hardly tell. I thought it was! The writing style flows well and sounds nice, and the third person pov was done nicely. The character sides change certain chapters, but it works well, and it's nice that banners were made at the beginning to make it easier to tell. The plot is also good. I enjoy that the brothers were separated and each has their own goals while wishing to see each other. The idea of brothers being separated and having to find each other isn't new, but it's done nicely.

Grammar

The grammar was really good. I saw a few mistakes here and there, but nothing major. Small things like commas, but I wouldn't really worry until you finish up the story. Then, hire an editor. But overall, grammar is nice.

Reader Engagement

I was highly engaged when reading. I enjoyed everything mentioned in the past of my review, and it made it easy to read. The endings add curiosity well so you want to read on, and I found myself sucking into the fight scenes because of the detail.

Overall
This is a really good story. I definitely enjoyed it, and very little needs work. I recommend this to those who like good world building, as I found this world really nicely made. The magic was great, too!

4.75 stars out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!