The CoDas: Reboot [By Hex]

Feedback/Fixes

I'm writing all the flaws and feedback down on this chapter. If there are any flaws that are not written here which you would like to add in then please do comment. 

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- Rewrite Shiro's battle with the many colorless from chapter 32-34. Instead of having her fight multiple (50-100) have her fight several (4-6) for a more intimidating challenge and allow the several colorless to be more fleshed out and unique in their own way. 

- Big plothole from chapters 8 to 13 regarding how Nathan was able to transport between the Matter Lens and Color Lens as well as how Emily was able to talk to Nathan in the matter lens. Needs a proper explanation. 

-Some few dialogues in the beginning chapters between Zack and Nathan are quite awkward and should be written better. 

- Nathan as a whole starts out like a 'normal' individual until later chapters give him a better personality. Either he has a better personality from the very start or try to make the transition from normal to unique better executed. 

- Chapter 42 and 43, some of the darker scenes in the chapter were overkill (For example, Zack using the hypnotized hostages as 'practice, having stood above a pile of dead bodies. This scene is just too much and makes zacks character hard to redeem) the story shouldn't be this dark and it prevents the story from fluctuating properly between a lighthearted atmosphere and a grim atmosphere. 

- Prologue, either have the prologue be about him retelling the story or should be something else entirely that can be more engaging with foreshadowing put into it. 

- Naming, Fluctuating between narrating fake and true Nathan can be confusing. May need to find a better method, rename them or execute it better. 

- Brutewolf, on execution, is a very intimidating and evil villain but on paper, comes off as a wuss and not a strong, intimidating villain. It lost to Nathan once in awakening, on fight 2, it was saved by another grunt sacrificing its life for the brutewolfs fragile head which is a copout.
When fighting Zack, it loses an arm and cries in pain when alternatively, being unfazed by the amputation could look so much cooler for the character. It escapes from zack and runs off to its 'mother' which is again, making it look like a wuss. 
The brutewolf only wins once against the Dominator which is deserved and is ok. 
The brutewolf needs to be reworked into a better villain for Nathan as well as other characters. 

- Add more major Colorless villains that the CoDas can face, one of them has been reused 2 times already (Brutewolf) and the other major villain was PK. Dominator was faced off by brutewolf so that does not count. 

- Add an arc where the characters are going on regular missions, there has not been a single arc where the characters actually go on a mission and exorcise a Colorless. This arc can give leeway to exploration around the country of Sweden and gives insight into how a normal work day for a CoDa would be like. This can also be implemented within the 2-month time skip that happens after The Possession Killer Arc to show Nathan using the missions as a way to train alongside Zack and Emily. 

-Speaking of Emily, she needs more screentime, there are literally only 2 parts where she fights against Colorless and she deserves more development with Nathan and Zack as well as more action. 

- The Distant Storm Arc, Never EVER base your story's atmosphere and tone off of your own mood, you will not be able to continue writing your story unless your current mood always matches the story's tone. NEVER EVER DO THIS AGAIN!

- There's a lack of establishment in Nathan's motivation and goal in the story. As of now, he's just being carried by the plot with no free will of his own to choose where he wants to go. The plot should be reactive, not proactive.

- The story summary needs a solid theme and synopsis that can be told with confidence. The current summary feels undecided and bleak when a story summary should feel confident to the point of being douchey. Not having a confident summary displays that the plot itself needs rework and direction. If the plot is solid, then the summary will also be solid.

- The fact that some readers still don't know Shiro's abilities, especially when I'm not intentionally trying to make it a mystery is a bad sign for writing. Fix it. In turn, if I do make it a mystery than do it better. 

- Make some more cool side characters on the CoDa's side. 

- Explain the functionality of CoDa abilities as well as Xorlaz better. 

- Simplify the Burst Ranks, 26 different ranks is actually too much to cover in the long term. 

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