I've decided to try to go back and rewrite this story. I'm trying to make the chapters longer by adding more details. I'm also changing most of it. Please read it and comment what you think, and I'll take any criticism into consideration. Thank you.
Engulfed in darkness, my senses slowly start coming back as I regain consciousness. First my sense of touch; as I'm overwhelmed with pain that is short lived. The next thing that returns is my hearing. I can just barely make out Tinkerbell's and Peter's voices, but they are muffled.
My eyes flash open; as my vision clears, I see Peter above. We watch each other, before I slowly look around, and realize I'm underwater. I see different colored coral, a few rocks, and some green seaweed. I can tell by the taste and smell that I'm in some kind of ocean tide pool.
A memory flashes through my head.
**** I'm being pulled deeper in the water, by a beautiful little mermaid with razor sharp teeth. As she looks behind me smiling, I glance back and take in the sight of my own tail. **** Slowly looking behind me, I see the same tail I saw in my vision. I give it a swish, and I move through the water. Swimming around for a moment, I forget where I am and what's happening.
I hear a muffled voice call out; what sounds like my name. Glancing up, I see Peter hovering above the water.
A wave of anger washes over me, as I look up at him. Not wanting to do something I regret, I quickly look around. Spotting a small cave, I swim towards it, as Peter continues calling my name. I keep swimming, only stopping when I hear a disturbance in the water.
My vision turns red as I look back and see that Peter dove into the water. Unable to stop myself, I scream out as my teeth resharpen, and my fingernails turn into claws. I quickly turn and swim towards him with an overflowing amount of rage.
His eyes widen as he quickly turns and starts for the surface. Just as he reaches the surface, I grab his ankle and drag him back down. He begins kicking, and jerking trying to get me to release him, but I hold on tight.
I start clawing at him with my free hand, and my claws get him across the chest. Blood starts blossoming out from his chest surrounding us in a cloud of red.
His mouth opens in a silent scream as he takes a mouthful of water and starts gagging. I go to scratch him again, but something shoots through the water going through my shoulder.
I scream looking to see an arrow protruding from my shoulder. I gasp, as I wrench it out tossing it away in the water. Looking back towards Peter, I see Tinkerbell pulling him out of the water.
I breathe heavily as I hold a hand against my shoulder as the red begins to fade from my vision.
My claws slowly disappear, and my teeth return to normal. I cover my mouth with my free hand as horror goes through me.
I quickly swim to the surface, rising up to my shoulders above the water; holding one against my bleeding shoulder.
I see Peter gasping for air, as Tinkerbell peels his shirt away; revealing four large gashes across his chest and abdomen.
I cry out Peter's name in horror, going to swim closer, but some girl appears out from behind a large oak tree; sporting a crossbow, aimed straight at my chest.
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