As the title said it's just a test about if your OC is a Mary Sue, anyways send in your OC in the comments to determine if it is a Mary Sue or not.
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I am okay with any fandoms as majority of Gary Sue and Mary Sue are much similar, I am...
(Okay thank you first of all! And sorry for the delay, had some life issues regarding school and I'm back.)
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- I actually enjoyed the name a lot, and the fact he is asexual which is not commonly used.Cheers. -Unique species, it's the first time I came in contact with a species like this, I never heard of it. Very interesting. Nice. -Okay, I didn't receive much information for his appearance but I get a simple image. Going to focus on the backstory before I evaluate the overall. I really, really wished you could give more details because it kind of bland. Does he have pale skin like every vampire?
-So I've read the backstory (most important part), it is not bad and I can't say the greatest. Anyways, I am in the middle of I get it and I'm confused. So, I didn't really understood why Absinthe drugged their food. The story isn't really marry sue but I really encouraged adding more details to make the story look like sense. I still really doesn't understood why the twins hated Whisper, did they neglect him? Spoken nasty things? I'm not sure, what I will suggest is this story is a good base, however it is not yet a full grown story. Personally I believe you could try and add more events to the story or turning points since the story doesn't really sum up to Whisper's personality, it needs more events to support it. You could try and enhance it and add details since I am still unsure of what kind of powers does Whisper have. Mind reader? Super strength? Magical power? Suggestions might include explaining why Whisper is acting strangely, does he have some sort of disorder? Is it the substance's affect?
-His dislikes are quite relevant, though I don't understood his hatred towards his sister
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-Alright, so at the start you have mention Whisper wants attention and he gets it through his personality. I will say his scores are alright, I liked the fact you have included a weapon that isn't used in many stories. I could completely understand why his strength is higher and I guess I could let it pass. Though I would say, these scores belong in the middle since his personality is the only flaw here, I would really encouraged every character to have a big flaw of some sort. Like my Oc is stupid, I am horrible at math and I failed 90%.
Overall!- It's not bad. The entire story seems more like a good base than an entire story, I enjoyed it a lot and I suggested twisting the background story. Anyways, I hope Whisper will get his own book soon and I could see him with my eyes! :)
! Please remember my opinions are only for reference. Don't go ham and full on marry sue on me because I didn't give a review you wished. Anyways. Caw caw ba bye. !
