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𝐂𝐀𝐢𝐫𝐞𝐥𝐥3 - II

WHISPER OF THE WIND
by CAirell3

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Judge irivyle

- COMMENT

The world-building is praise-worthy. Nagustuhan ko rin ang iyong writing style dahil bukod sa malinis itong basahin at tignan, malaman din ang bawat salitang iyong inilathala at hindi basta-basta. I also commend you for your broad choice of words, it made your scenes and narrative poetical. Pinaganda nito ang kabuuan ng bawat kabanata at isa rin ito sa naging factor kung bakit mas naging unique pa ang iyong kuwento. Though minor mistakes in technicality and grammar were spotted, you still did well. Kaya namang i-edit at i-improve iyon, and there will always be a room for improvement.

Overall, mahusay at maganda ang pagkakasulat sa kuwento. The color is there, and so is the magic. The fantasy elements are profound and they made the world you created even more extraordinary. Magaling!

- CHARACTERS I LIKE OUT OF EVERYONE ELSE

I really like Marreanne's character. Her vibe and energy made me drawn into her. I love how she just impulsively buys everything from the market and money limitation is unlikely in her vocabulary. Parang ang sarap niyang maging kaibigan, dahil bukod sa kaya kang gastusan, she also likes to compliments her friends. She equates a sunshine and I love her for that.

- PART OF THE BOOK THAT I LIKE

I like that one scene in chapter 3 where Quilya and Aeriah were about to ask a vendor in Karirana but suddenly backed up kasi baka raw iba ang lengguwaheng sinasalita ng mga tao sa realm or lugar na 'yon, only to find out that they actually speak the same language as them when Marreanne was the one who asked the vendor. That really got me! Ang chaotic lang HAHAHA!

- MESSAGE TO THE AUTHOR

I could tell that you really have a passion for writing. Your efforts are visible in every chapter of your story. Just by how you crafted your words well, it already made you a great writer.

You are a hidden gem, and I wish for you and your story to be discovered by the crowd. You're a well-deserving winner and I would like to praise you for your masterpiece!