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grimmreaper18

The Tamer Without A Beast
by grimmreaper18

COMMENTS

FANTASY CATEGORY
Judge Exrineance

― BOOKCOVER: 4 / 5

The book cover provided me with a clear image of Nekuma's appearance, and I appreciate how it encapsulated the essence of the story, radiating an aura of action with blue fragments encircling the 'cat'. One small suggestion I have is about the color choice for the font; it would be beneficial to ensure that it contrasts well with the background color, for example, a lighter tone font on a dark background and vice versa.

― DESCRIPTION: 6 / 7

The synopsis is concise and well-crafted, effectively introducing our protagonist and outlining the storyline without unnecessary elements that might spoil the plot.

― CHARACTERS: 21 / 23

Numerous characters play significant roles in the story, many of whom are identified by their unique user IDs. I am interested in learning more about them beyond the story context. Each character serves a purpose and adds depth to the narrative, and once their role is completed, they gracefully exit the scene, which I find quite satisfactory.

― GRAMMATICAL/TYPOGRAPHICAL: 9 / 12

From what I observed, the story seems to have potential, similar to a diamond waiting to be polished. As I delved further into the narrative, I noticed the author's growth and improvement. Initially, there were some unnecessary punctuation marks that detracted from the overall coherence of the sentences, but these gradually became less prominent as the story progressed. Instead of listing specific examples here, I kindly suggest revisiting the chapter multiple times to discern these errors and make the necessary revisions.

― PLOT: 23 / 25

Although the plot of 'The Tamer Without a Beast' may be considered a classic trope with elements reminiscent of literature and animation, it brings its own unique twist and flavor. The story revolves around the central goal of hunting and killing a mystical beast, and it stays true to this focus without introducing distracting elements like mushroom villains. From the beginning with Orikia to the end, the plot remains centered on this quest.

― NARRATIVE: 18 / 20

Reading the story felt like experiencing a light novel in Taglish language. I appreciate the straightforward writing style, especially in the action scenes where there are no unnecessary flowery words. However, besides Nekuma, it was challenging for me to visualize things because Teiro didn't provide detailed descriptions. As someone not deeply familiar with MMORPGs, I found it difficult to imagine the weapons and powers introduced in the story. You can call me a noob, haha.

― GENRE: 8 / 8

Indeed, this is a fantasy story that branches off into a different realm. Centered around virtual reality, it effectively fulfilled its purpose and managed to not disappoint me in the slightest. I was truly engrossed in the online game known as the 'Battle of Tamers' within the story.

― OVERALL NOTE

Being involved in a competition necessitates me being technical. However, setting the technical aspect aside, I truly relished reading A Tamer Without a Beast. It evoked a sense of nostalgia from my high school days when I was engrossed in this genre.

FEEDBACK

― What was my first impression as a reader?

Kirito always comes to mind when I encounter this type of story. SAO had a significant impact on me, so I felt excited when I read the description of this story. I'm not comparing it to anything, but it made me think of him.

― Which character did I like out of everyone?

Leonidas stood out, particularly when he conveyed sentiments such as 'no one cares if someone dies. This is not just a survival game...' He truly grasped the gravity of the situation by recognizing that it was more than just a survival game-it was a life-and-death struggle. From the beginning, he exhibited a discerning mindset that considered both the pros and cons. Leonidas possessed a strength that was unmatched by many in the online game, particularly in dire situations.

― Which unexpected scene left me emotional?

During the time when Phoenix was poisoned and trapped in the dungeon, there was a similar feeling I experienced while playing Final Fantasy. I recall going through a challenging and time-consuming journey that almost led me to give up. Upon completing the game, the epilogue revealed that my character sacrificed himself to save the main character of the next installment of FF. The emotions I felt during this moment mirrored what I felt when Phoenix was facing the poison curse in the game.

― Which part of the book did I like?

I appreciate the title for a particular reason. It seems to symbolize the core of the story, which revolves around the mystical beast. I found it impressive how everything ties back to the plot.

― What did I not like about the story

Instead of saying 'not like', I would describe it as 'not enough'. As this is a fantasy genre, specifically high fantasy, I found the creative narrative aspect to be lacking in providing a rich enough world setting for me to fully immerse myself in the online game. I was hoping for more descriptive adjectives rather than just nouns to paint a clearer picture of what the world looks like.

― Advice

Other than the points mentioned earlier, I don't have anything else to add. I really enjoyed reading the story as it reminded me of the times when I was deeply immersed in this particular genre in anime and manga.