Endurance

My thoughts

This is where I share what I thought, what I liked and what I disliked in the story…

Let's talk about disappointments first

I didn't like how I didn't mention public perception and their views about Vegas and their family at the start of the story. I didn't establish how important of a person he is at the start of the story.

It played a huge part in the latter where Pete openly confessed about his past to the public. I used this only in the later part of the story , maybe I should have written some bits in the beginning about public perception of their family and how for them Gun is like the president.

The things I like

There are so many things I like in this story. I like the bond between Pete’s mother and him, even though it’s short I believe the impact carries throughout the story. Sometimes I regret killing her and I would imagine how pete would be if she was there during Vegas Amnesia. He would have been more strong.

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Coming to Vegas, he is the greenest flag ever and I made his personality like he is waiting for his mate. It suits him in this story and he loves Pete with all of his heart. I like the way he fought for Pete after remembering him. He was devastated to hear what pete went through but at the same time he fought for his integrity.

I think he is proud of the fact that he fell in love with pete even after forgetting him, in fact he is smug about it.

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Tankhun is a character that we know is good but he is also the reason for Pete's sadness. He influenced Vegas so much in the middle . I love the redemption arc I gave to his character by helping pete in the latter part of the story.

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And my favourite pete, God , i never cried this much while writing any story or any character. I went through so many emotions, i was constantly thinking about what to write to show his pain in the right way. I cried so much throughout his journey and when he confronted vegas finally I was like , ok, I can breathe…

I always love writing confrontations and i like the confrontations between him and Vegas . I felt it in my bones when he asked how’s that fair want happened to him?

I love the way I made pete deal with insecurities. I want his character to know that he shouldn’t feel insecure about his body cause he had given birth  but at the same time I want to show how Tawan's words impact him at his vulnerable moments, and I love how I led the situation into a smut. 😉

When I was writing I felt like Pete’s character went through a whole whiplash of emotions. He would be happy playing with his pup at one moment, then feels wrecked because of Tawan, wants to forget Vegas altogether, but couldn’t watch tawan and Vegas together…. A whole rollercoaster of emotions. I hope nobody goes through that many emotions at a single point.

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I am slightly disappointed with the scene between Pete and Gun after the Paris trip because I wanted it to be more impactful than what I have written. I wanted it to wreck me completely but it didn't do that. It fell short of what I expected. Maybe I can add something and do it in the book .

I think that’s my thoughts at precise  I want to hear your thoughts like what you like and what you don't and where should I improve?

And do you have a particular dialogue/scene you liked in the whole story? If so, what is it? Take your time and tell me