Bloodied Uniform

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by PieceReviewer

Dedicated to ceiralie

by PieceReviewer

Title of the Story: Bloodied Uniform

Link of the Story: http://www.wattpad.com/story/9502672-bloodied-uniform [external link available]

Profile link of the author: http://www.wattpad.com/user/ceiral

Brief Summary: "I don't want to believe it. But I saw her." "Is this the effect of losing your team, Levi?" Is it just hallucination or it's for real? Is she the only one? Pairing: Levi x Petra

Reviews:

Good thing, I've already watched AoT, otherwise I don't know what I'll write. :D

You know, I hate your story. You know why? it's because I want Levi for myself! XD Hehehe. Just kidding with the hate your story part. I liked it actually, especially the teaser. It made it's purpose of enticing your readers and making them want to read the next part.

However, some of the next parts are confusing. I mean, I guess it's because of a few grammatical errors, or some unnecessary sentences present, but I know you can easily revise it. I also noticed that every part is short so I'm thinking that it would have been better if it's a one-shot/one-part story so the feelings that readers built up from the start would not be interrupted or something like that. Well, it's just a suggestion, nevermind me. :D

Moreover, in my case, I guess the title "Bloodied Uniform" is inappropriate to the story. It looks like a horror story when in fact after you read it, it's more about romance. Try something like, "With You Again" or anything that suggest the story but is still interesting. It's up to you. ^__^

As a whole, the story is nice and romantic. You did a good job. Keep up the good work, okay? :)

Sincerely,

Hihyo_chickenj0yZ