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Title of the Story:  Midnight Song

Link of the Story: http://www.wattpad.com/story/13283958-midnight-song-one-shot [external link available]

Profile link of the author: www.wattpad.com/user/Animeaddict04

Brief Summary: A Story of a girl who is struggling with her XP (xeroderma pigmentosum) that doesn't allows you to go outside when Day because your skin can't endure the rays of the sun. Once you received even a little it'll burn your skin or worst....you'll die in an instant. This girl only goes outside when night. On night, she's a live street performer and there he met this guy that make her hear beat. Will she able to continue her love until to the end if her life span is only short?

Reviews: 

The plot is so superb! Very unusual. Totoo ba yung sakit na yun? Buti na lang wala akong ganun. Wehehe.

A few typos, and I mean a few, kaya I commend you for that.

Then to the characters. Mas maganda sana kung dinescribe mo sila ng kaunti, physically. Lalo na si Cyrus. Kasi ang sabi mo dalagita si Khaira, so I presume binatilyo din si Cyrus, yet may scooter na siya. May lisensiya ba siya? Hindi sinabi ang ages nila so it's a bit confusing.

Dun sa storyline naman, medyo turn off yung nag-aminan agad sila. I mean, you've just met each other and knew almost nothing at all about each other tapos nagka-aminan agad? It's unrealistic. I'm thinking na it's better kung lagi na silang nagkikita noon simula ng gabing iyon, nagbo-bonding. Si Khaira, mas na-inlove kay Cyrus, then si Cyrus naman nagkaka-feelings na rin kay Khaira. Pero magtataka si Cyrus kung bakit kailangan na niyang umalis sa umaga, something like that. Dun magsisimula yung conflict. Mas ma-eenhance yung emotions ng readers kapag ganun.

Anyway, it was a touching story, and one of the good oneshot's I've read so far. Sana nga series na lang ito eh. I really think that this story has a potential.

Well, that ends my review. I dunno if I helped you or what xD but you did a good job here, considering your age. Keep up the good work, Christine! <3

Sincerely, 

Hihyo_chickenj0yZ

P.S.  Pa-dedicate naman sa 'yo minsan haha :D Sorry pala kung late na masyado tong review. xD