(Highest ranking #2 in marysue)
[previously titled "marysue roasts"]
*warning*
If you are a sensitive little child don't read this book, you'll probably end up crying... AND READ MY DISCLAIMER FIRST!!
Basically, you can send me whatever you want and...
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Now that you've read through that long ass profile, lets get on with my rant
1)SPECIAL ABILITY: to be honest, he's ability is SO FUCKING GARYSTU LIKE. I mean he gets away with EVERYTHING he messes up??? Are you for fucking real??? I know thats what makes him "special" but a character with no flaws is a garystu and everybody hates a garystu/marysue
2) the fact that the "backstory" JUST DESCIRBED HIS ENTIRE LIFE STORY. thats not a backstory isit?? Its his life story now -_- I'll go more in dept in teh next part
3) "he was abandoned on the street" of course he did. Its a real cliche world we're living in, where all the parents suck. And later on i read that "a future pop star's father" came to kidnap carol.... WTF. WHY WOULD HE WANNA DO THAT?? Next, theres the 10 year old simon the jerk. Apparently kharrie had to live with this guy for the next few years, but if he's so jerky why would you wanna live with him??
Living on the streets with a jerky guy just made his life worse actually. Then there's the whole part about houston...that was the most brief description ever. To be honest, houston can be quite a cool charactet if you developed him more(like answer the burning question why a ex murderer would adopt two random kids on the street??) So when houston builts his new house on the "random hill" kharrie finds out that his new neighbour is good old carol (wasnt she kidnapped? Whats she doing here?)
Later, it seems that Carol and kharrie have to fight some evil and uhhh go into an enchanted forest to find monsters to kill others??( that makes them the evil ones actually) Oh ya...the last part really gets on my nerves though. HOW DOES HE GET POSSESSED, DEFEAT MONSTERS(you mean the ones he summoned at first-_-), TRIES TO TAKE OVER THE WORLD, DIES...THEN COMES BACK TO LIVE TO MARRY CAROL????
4) in conclusion there are a lot of un answered questions that make kharrie seem like just another garystu rolling in the trash bin. It would be cool though if you wrote a story about him explaining all these(just a suggestion) but if im gonna just judge base on the description you gave me tbe garystu rank will be quite high.... (mostly due to the last part) also, i did note that you sectioned this book under "humor" but uh (no offense) the description you send me leans more to the cringey side then to the comedy side....just saying dont hate me or my book(you did read my disclaimer didnt you???)
Stu-level: 99/1000(note that its "1000" not "100")
