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Gold Digger

Reviewed by: _itz_shifana

Author: bookmark-13

Cover: [7/10]

The cover is nicely done but, as the story basically revolves around the female protagonist I advice you to use a cover which gives a proper look of the story, it's simply a girl laying and two men staring it can be done more precisely. Also try your hands at different fonts however I like the color scheme that you've chosen. 

Description/Summary: [4/10]

There were several mistakes in the Blurb/Description itself which were usually weird sentences like, "Suzanna, 19 years old was young, supposed to live a wild life, but here she was in London, broke and almost homeless. Yet, everything will change for her when she will meet a successful long lost friend who will advise her to create a profile on a Gold Digger service website."

This makes sense but, in a weird manner. I know it's confusing but, hear me out. The placement of words and continuous change of tense kills the feel of the story. You can put it like, "Suzanna was a 19 years old girl (what's the need of young and old here? and that to together?) she was supposed to live an adventurous life ( wild life makes no sense except one. lol. ) but here she was, in London. Broke and homeless. Will everything change? Will the advice given by her friend work? Can she survive the life of a 'Gold Digger'?

I'm not saying this is perfect but, this adds tension and creates curiosity, I hope you get what I mean. A blurb is what pulls in the reader to read your book, so you SHOULD make it catchy enough so they click on that 'Read' button.

Chapter Review: [5/10]

I read 2 chapters, so here we go based on that; the start gave me a slight hint about Suzanna's life, but the weird sentence's there also made me a tad bit uncomfortable. The tense kept changing many times and somewhere I did feel like the book needs editing. NOW.

The thing I like was, this book wasn't that cliche. tbh I hate cliche's i'll continue the story further on because I loved the way the author tried to turn the story in a different manner. 

Activity of the Writer: 

The writer very well associated with readers and others, one thing I like about them.

Plot: [5/10]

As I've already mentioned I enjoyed the plot but, it's moving a little fast. Like she agreeing to join the website so soon was something a sane person won't do right away but, a broke one can do. so, it depends. But, for me it was fast. 

Overall Advise: 

Keep writing, with a little editing, a grip on grammar and sentence structure this book will get the real readers.