WHriters Award [Closed]

Photography in love

Author: otterhyuck
Judge: HannaahWH
Overall Score: [84.4%]

-Prologue [18.5] 20%
Ok i loved her/his prologue. Sorry im not sure kung babae or lalake yung author nito but the way na ginawa niya yung prologue was so romantic. Sa first sentence palang ng prologue hinakayat na ako't binigyan  ako ng focus paraa ipagpatuloy yung pagbabasa that for me ay dagdag points naman talaga, so why i came up with 18.5 kung maganda naman? well, Yes i like how it's started but for me as a readers medyo pumalya lang sa ending, i mean, Walang kaso saken yung Unhappy ending but i wanted to feel the goose bumps, the infact! yung mag papa realize sakin na 'Ow kailangan kong tapusin to' and that's the missin' part na mej. kinulang ka but yet, nagustuhan ko ang prologue mo and 18.5 is not that bad

-Book cover [20] 20%
The book cover of this story really amazed me. Ito talaga yung masasabi mong simple yet attractive. Hindi na kailangan ng kung ano anong keme, just simple font and the picture makukuha mona agad yung atensiyon ng readers mo. Keep up the good work honey♡

-Q&A [15] 20%
feel bad for the score. But mayroon kase akong hinahanap na innovative answer. It's very common na sasabihin molang na 'Their's a moral lesson' and 'Its not about love' because we'all know na halos lahat ng story may moral lesson. As a contestant you need to pursuade me that you're the champion with innovative answer, i know you can do better than that darlin'. But overall i like the confidence of you, the way you answered the question is so powerful.

-Plot [30.9] 40%

First of all i just wanted to congratulate you for making this kind of art.👏

So ayun na nga, i like how it started, the sad mood and the awra of the story is really good. To be honest i loved the stories with this kind of opening. Yung tipong papa curiosin ka kung pano at baket? kudos to that!

May mga suggestion lang ako as your reader, First the bold sentence, May na basa ako sa isa sa mga book na hindi dapat binobold yung sentence lalo na't sinasabe to like this "Hey", "What's up" na nakita ko sa story mo.
Suggesto ko lang na mas bagay kong wag mo na siya i bold sweetheart, Lakas maka galit kase yung dating.

Second, The spacing. Yung spacing mo sobrang haba like this.

Eg:

Photography in love

photography in love

Mas maganda tignan kung babawasan mo yung spacing sa story kase may mga readers na tamad mag scroll and mag basa like me.

Last is the transition, for me the transition of the story is too slow, Pwedeng wag mo nang isulat yung mga hindi importanteng pangyayare, kase nagiging boring, baka mabagot yung mga readers.

Overall, The impact is nice. The thriller is in their, The message is so uggh♡ gustong gusto ko talaga kung paano mo sinumulan yung story♡ keep it up honey♡ you have your potential! goodluck.

-Admin Hannah

📎Critique is a somewhat formal word that typically refers to a careful judgment in which someone gives an opinion about something. AS YOUR ATE AND KUYA and AS AN ADMIN binigay lang namin ang OPINYON namin at SUGGESTION para story niyo, wag sana kayong magtanim ng sama ng loob dahil it was just our opinion. LAGI MONG TATANDAAN NA YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER! WE'ALL THE ADMINS ARE PROUD OF YOU kase nakasali ka saamen at sa awards na ito! wag kang matakot magsulat ng marami pang work ha! YOU'RE A STAR BABY! SHINE♡