The Broken Promises

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Author:charlenemarila
Judge: HannaahWH
Overall Score:[83.8]

-Prologue [18.5] 20%
The opening of prologue is not bad, it's not good nor beautiful instead, simplicity. The opening prologue is kinda boring and common pakinggan but what amazed me is the ending. It was so powerful. Na goose bump ako. Yung masasabi mo talagang "Ok,ok i need to read this until the end." You're the first contestant na na judge kong nagpa ramdam saken ng ganiyan. I wanted to give you a perfect score or near perfect but nakulangan talaga ako sa impact nung opening. Suggest kong ayusin mo yun kase maganda sa story yung maganda sa umpisa, tapos magwawakas din ng maganda.

-BookCover [18.5] 20%
The book cover is fine and simple, 18.5 kase nakulangan ako. I mean i know you can do better than that. Siguro about sa font na ginamit sa BC or the Background color. Yung magpapa focus ng atensiyon ng reader, but overall it's nice♡

-Q&A [16] 20%
feel bad for the score. But mayroon kase akong hinahanap na innovative answer. It's very common na sasabihin molang na 'Their's a moral lesson' and 'It's my own work' because we'all know na halos lahat ng story may moral lesson. As a contestant you need to pursuade me that you're the champion with innovative answer, i know you can do better than that darlin'. But overall i like the confidence of you, the way you answered the question is so powerful.

-Plot [30.8] 40%
At first, Hindi ko dama yung characters, The transition is so fast. Ambilis ng kwento. Nakikita korin na ginagawa mong bold yung ibang sentence like this "The broken promises" na hindi naman dapat. May nabasa ako sa isang book na hindi dapat binonold yung mga sentences. The story also is so common, na may boss na magagalitin tas empleyado niya magkakagusto sa kaniya and they'll fell in love with each other, try add some innovative scene baby, i know you can do it. But somehow, I like the name of your Characters, Athena and Nicholas lakas maka greek Myth. and old♡ at aaminin ko, nakakakilig yung story mo it's so romantic hahah para akong tanggang ngumingiti habang binabasa yun. You're a great writer! keep it up! wag susuko sa pangarap ah! muah♡

-Admin Hannah

📎Critique is a somewhat formal word that typically refers to a careful judgment in which someone gives an opinion about something. AS YOUR ATE AND KUYA and AS AN ADMIN binigay lang namin ang OPINYON namin at SUGGESTION para story niyo, wag sana kayong magtanim ng sama ng loob dahil it was just our opinion. LAGI MONG TATANDAAN NA YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER! WE'ALL THE ADMINS ARE PROUD OF YOU kase nakasali ka saamen at sa awards na ito! wag kang matakot magsulat ng marami pang work ha! YOU'RE A STAR BABY! SHINE♡