Mystical World: The Elemental

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ni WHwarriors

ni WHwarriors

Author: shourii
Judge: KiyoshiWH
Overall Score: [87.3]

-Prologue [18] 20%
Watzup kuys, Your prologue is sad, i mean wala namang kaso kung malungkot pero, it was supposed to be sad. Supposed to be sad pero hindi ko na feel yung lungkot, siguro mabilis lang yung transition or kulang sa emotion but it's nice by the way kaya binigyan kita ng 18 points.

-Bookcover [20] 20%
Kuys, Ang ganda sa mata ng Book Cover mo, simula background, sa color sa font angkop na angkop talaga yung kwento mo sa book cover. Ito talaga yung masasabi mong lakas maka hatak readers.

-Q&A [14.3] 20%
Suggest kolang na wag mong iisipin at i-expect na hindi ka mananalo. You're hoping pero dapat maging confident ka sa work mo kase masterpiece yan, pinagpaguran mo't pinagisipan ng mabuti. Magaling kang manunulat kayaa ipagpatuloy molang yan.

-Plot [35] 40%
Madami na akong nabasang katulad nang ginawa mo sa opening ng story, yung may mag fa-flashback na pangyayare mula sa past or sa future ganun kaya hindi ko na feel yung excitement. Meron akong mga napansin na ilang word lang naman na sumablay katulad ng 'Musta' instead of 'Kamusta' Pero overall magaling kaparim magdala ng story, yung mga character at plot ay pinagisipan so keep it up! magaling kang manunulat wag na wag mong titigilan ang pagsusulat ah.

-Admin Kiyoshi

📎Critique is a somewhat formal word that typically refers to a careful judgment in which someone gives an opinion about something. AS YOUR ATE AND KUYA and AS AN ADMIN binigay lang namin ang OPINYON namin at SUGGESTION para story niyo, wag sana kayong magtanim ng sama ng loob dahil it was just our opinion. LAGI MONG TATANDAAN NA YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER! WE'ALL THE ADMINS ARE PROUD OF YOU kase nakasali ka saamen at sa awards na ito! wag kang matakot magsulat ng marami pang work ha! YOU'RE A STAR BABY! SHINE♡