Crowned

20 1 2

ni WHwarriors

ni WHwarriors

Author: carliensx
Judge: HannaahWH
Overall Score: [93.4]

-Prologue [18.5] 20%
I really love your style in writing. The filipino language and how you open the story is beautiful. Sa una palang makukuha mo na agad yung attention ng readers, that so nice. So why 18.5? when you deserve more than that? Ok, ok listen. The opening is good but, medyo nalito lang ako sa eksena, the transition is so fast, ambilis ng pangyayare medyo naguluhan ako as reader i wanted the story na hindi slow hindi fast pero tama lang yung daloy

-Book Cover [18.7] 20%
The book cover is simple but somehow powerful. Yung pagiging simple niya yung mas lalong nag paganda ng Book. The color and the background is also good.
But i think you could do better than that.

-Q&A [19] 20%
Your answer was common for me kaya 19 yung binigay ko, it's almost perfect pero sayang parin, Although common yung nilalaman ng answer mo yung sagot mo is fact. A very true answer, Lalo na yung sa part na ' you have a unique story' that for me is unique talaga siya. Great job for that♡

-Plot [37.2] 40%
I could say na yung mali molang is the opening is good but the ending failed me, i wanted to feel the goosebump. The infact, yung mapapasabi ako sa sarili ko na, Ay dapat ipagpatuloy ko to, at ayun yung nadama ko sa chapter 1 ng story mo. Dun lang yung kulang mo but overall, masasabi ko talagang WOW. Bumibilib talaga ako sa writing skills mo lalo na kung pano mo binuhay yung character sa story mo. Your story is crazy! kakaiba siya kahit medjo common yung mga princess stories hindi mo ko binigo sa pagbigay ng bagong texture ng story and plot at duon mo ko napabilib, nakuha mo yung atensiyon ko duon.

Just wanted to say na sana ipagpatuloy mo lang ang sinimulan mo, you're a great author! Goodluck and godbless♡

-Admin Hannnah

📎Critique is a somewhat formal word that typically refers to a careful judgment in which someone gives an opinion about something. AS YOUR ATE AND KUYA and AS AN ADMIN binigay lang namin ang OPINYON namin at SUGGESTION para story niyo, wag sana kayong magtanim ng sama ng loob dahil it was just our opinion. LAGI MONG TATANDAAN NA YOU'RE A GREAT WRITER! WE'ALL THE ADMINS ARE PROUD OF YOU kase nakasali ka saamen at sa awards na ito! wag kang matakot magsulat ng marami pang work ha! YOU'RE A STAR BABY! SHINE♡