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TITLE
Definitely earned a gold star for this one. The entire story begins with such a dramatic change and it definitely deserves some spotlight.
BLURB
I absolutely love how there is absolutely no spoilers in the summary. It seems like a perfect trailer for the book.
However there are a few punctuations missing.
career-driven (Don't forget the hyhen)
There should be a full stop at the end for the sentence, '.........as she truly believes she loves Calum.'
I also recommend giving credits at the end of the summary and not at the beginning because the readers are more interested to read the summary directly.
COVER
It's just beautiful! I love the calligraphy style used for the title and the author's name; it's clearly visible and bright in contrast to the image behind it. Maybe a Wattpad symbol at the top right hand corner could be the cherry on top!
PLOT AND GRAMMAR
I know for sure that if I was in her place, I would have smacked Calum right on his face.
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The plot was wonderful. It was moving at the right pace and definitely made me want to read further. You have a wonderful way of bringing out the emotions from the reader because for real, Calum pissed me off.
However there are a few things that could be taken care of.
1. Example: I wasn't sure if it was nerves or excitement, but both feelings were mixed and clouded by judgement.
What it could have been: Mixed feelings of nerves and excitement clouded my judgement.
Keep it simple!
2. In the first chapter, our MC brings out the fact that she was stress by telling it. Let the readers know that she is stressed. Was her office outfit giving out tired vibes? Did she bother to comb her hair? Was her colleague reeking of expensive perfume? Did she forget to eat or have a cup of coffee?
3. 'I brought you a drink, I didn't ask you to marry me." he...
Remember to use a comma after this sentence because words like replied, said, say, tell, told are being used. If an action is being performed like turning around, or standing a full stop is used.
OVERALL
It was really nice to read a book from this trope again, I missed office romance for a while. By the way, the aesthetic banners at the beginning and at the end of the chapter were really quite charming and fit the moodboard for the story.
I wish you good luck with your future projects! _xxAMxx
