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TITLE
Mysterious! At a glance, a reader would believe that the book is either sci-fi/fantasy-related. A catchy title like that will make anybody look back twice, so good job!
BLURB
It's almost quite rare to write the death of a character in the blurb since the chapters begin with her being alive. But it definitely will place a chokehold on the reader.
Here's another sample in which your blurb can be shorter and more mysterious.
Being a Fea, Rowan possesses a furry wolf tail, wolf ears, and magic in her blood. People claim that her best friend accidentally jumped down the cliff but Rowan had a different interpretation. The strangers in dark hoods, her friend's odd conduct leading up to it, and most importantly, the bend in her legs as she leaped from the edge were what Rowan witnessed. Rowan is now on a quest to learn the truth and exact retribution.
COVER
Stunning! I feel like that character aesthetic brings the book to life—the blue matches with the borders placed around the cover. The title and the author's name are visible. I love the font used for the title, it gives the cover a polished look.
PLOT
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The book starts quite well with Rowan and Violet's friendship and the banter between them. It would almost be impossible to realise that one of them would end up dead. There are a few errors in the story that I found in the story that could be easily fixed.
1. "Sorry, I didn't realise that was something you ever actually did" she said smirking.
What it could have been: "Sorry!" She smirked and continued her taunt, "I didn't realise that was something you ever did."
Usually, whenever a dialogue is being typed with inverted commas, the dialogue will end in a comma before words such as say, said, tell, told etc.
Words that denote action such as smirking will end with a full stop.
"yep" she said.
What it could have been: She agreed / "Yep."
Not every sentence requires a word said either and try to avoid its repetition by using actions or just ending dialogues without an action or statement.
Commas and full stops are an absolute nightmare to authors and I remember struggling with them for my books too. Try using Grammarly or Microsoft Word so that it can help catch those errors for you while you are in the process of editing your book.
OVERALL
I wonder what kind of a character Adelaide is. She seems really calm and unfazed at any challenge or obstacle present. I wonder how Rowan is going to cope with grief. I believe that this book can reach its fullest potential if it's exposed to book clubs.
I wish you good luck with your future projects! ♥ Lexilouwho04
