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TITLE
It's catchy and it's all that matters! It gives a lot of teen fiction, romance, action and fantasy vibes from the title alone. The idea that the book is a potential part of a series makes it a lot cooler! So great job on that!
BLURB
I truly really liked the blurb. It had no spoilers in it. Gave a really mysterious description of what the readers are getting into.
I would however suggest, eliminating the first line and starting with; He believes in hate at first sight. That, to me is the most attractive line in the blurb and it's best to begin it that way.
COVER
It was just amazing! I really loved the shades of blue and black clashing in the background and the characters were just beautiful! I love the font used in the title. I would recommend putting more royal-themed calligraphy for the legacy of bluebloods 1 and making it cover the entire top line rather than just being placed in the middle. The author's name is clearly seen so that's fantastic!
PLOT AND GRAMMAR
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It was just simply marvellous!
What I really like the most was the use of ancient English words that corresponded with the time zone of the story. Really brought out life in the characters.
The only minor errors I could find within dialogues were probably the use of capital letters and commas.
Example: "Too late for that now." a feminine...
'a' should be in capital letters.
Example: Lady Jemma smiled "Glad to see...
There should be a full stop after 'smile'.
If words like said, says, tell, and told etc come into a sentence, a comma is used.
Words that involve action in them will have a full stop.
I also noticed that each chapter was approximately 30 minutes long. Sure, the chapters were packed with humour, action and a little bit of frustration from our characters but I would recommend splitting the chapters up.
Remember, more chapters = more votes = increased ranking in the Wattpad Algorithm = more readers
The descriptions were strung with beautiful words. It didn't feel like information was dumped. There were the right amount of lines for each paragraph as well.
I just noted that the first chapter was written in the third POV and let me tell you, that is one of the hardest things to write and you absolutely nailed it perfectly!
You also have a wonderful way of portraying each character's emotions and the fact that you could make the reader feel pissed or amazed at the insulting and sarcastic responses are just *a chef's kiss.*
OVERALL
It feels like a novel that has been polished and edited a lot of times because the flow of the story was just brilliant. My favourite has to be chapter 4, that chapter went from level 0 to level 100 real quick and it had quite the cliffhanger.
I wish you good luck with your future projects and keep writing! HowerHowe ♥
