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TITLE
The title definitely gives out dark fantasy vibes. I believe that the title is yet to be established in the story. So far, we are seeing our electrical character trying to figure out himself as well as his surroundings.
BLURB
A perfect trailer! Does not give out any spoilers. Contains a very charming description of what the reader would be getting into, so good job on that!
COVER
It was attractive. I love how the colours complement each other and the pink flower stands out. The calligraphy and the choice of fonts are excellent too!
PLOT AND GRAMMAR
The amount of mystery and fantasy vibes is just-
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Really love how much mystery we have around Blue.
Anybody reading the prologue knows that the book is going to be spectacular! It's scary how those twisted realities might actually be the truth too.
The first line of the first chapter has a very strong impact on the reader. This is not a cliche line and it definitely had me reading every word of it.
Maybe the only times where I came across an error were just minor punctuation errors.
Example: I screamed "Watch! Watch! You are going to pay for what you have done. Let me show you her wrath"
What it should have been: I screamed, "Watch! Watch! You are going to pay for what you have done. Let me show her wrath."
Example: "Hey man, you are in my spot" Said the man...
Whenever there are words such as said, says, tell, told, replied etc. a comma is used to end the dialogue and the next word would begin with a lowercase letter.
Words that have action in them like turning around, looking back, and throwing a punch will have the dialogue ending at a full stop.
Other than that it was just a fabulous story!
OVERALL
This story is something I'd love to have an offline copy of. I was quite tempted to turn and read the next chapter too. The word limit of each chapter was right and I barely knew I reached the end of the chapter; which is good because I was totally invested while I was reading the story.
I wish you good luck with your future projects! Slivergrey
